| Title: Lesson Number One
| 30 May 2007 11:24 pm
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| Reviewer: Phoenix (Anonymous)
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Oh don't leave us there! Please update soon. By the way I'm glad that you're posting this story here. This site has been around for a while but it seems lately that the better authors are posting here and ffnet.
I hate endings like that... I'm sure Eileen will be rather confused to suddenly having to ten year old sons. Please dont tourture your readers with a long wait... :)
Wow, that was a powerful ending to a really cool chapter. What timing she has! I can't wait for more!
OMG! I can't believe it! Its Eileen. I knew this was going to happen eventually, but this is awful timing. Severus is young and sick, Harry is abused and depressed, and Tobias has his hands full! If Severus had been older it still would have been better. Wonderful Plot! I can't wait for the next chpater!
~Vint.
Good story so far. I like how you've made Tobias a nice but stern person.
I look forward to your next update!
Wow, I love it. :) Great great great. Little Severus is just darling. I'm loving all the interactions. i hope that there is more soon!
LOL at this line! "He picked off a piece of glitter, wondering how it got there before answering." Haha!
One thing I noticed, was that you keep using "draw" instead of "drawer". A draw is like drawing a picture. A drawer is a part of a chest of drawers.
Great story so far!
Whooooo! Awesome change! Tehe! Wow, I did not see that coming. How cool! I really like how Harry and the twins and everyone, including myself, see Severus as an older brother. I'm thinking Bill Weasley's kind of close to Severus' age so of course the twins would think he'd be fun to prank. Wow, how fun! The problem is, that older brother can always get their younger brothers back much worse!
Awesome, awesome story so far! I really loved this part, when Ron and Harry met:
"They stopped face to face, literally: Harry had grown enough that he and Ron were the same height." Yay!
Being young for Two weeks! Awesome. This should be really fun. I think it might be cool if Harry reaged a couple of days before Severus. Could be fun to explore that possibility, or maybe create an AU one-shot?
Sirius was a surprise, but not that much. I feel for him, I really do. He should love Harry, but he is immature. Why doesn't Harry still like him? He should at least. I felt that it was a little off that Harry didn't try to get Tobias off of Sirius when he was choking him, but maybe Harry was stunned. Doesn't Sirius WANT Harry anymore?
I thought that as soon as the potion landed on Severus, that Molly should have been furious with the twins and laid into them. It seemed a little off that she didn't XD
But awesome twist! I'm loving it! Great job!
| Title: Sneaking, Slithering, Snapes
| 28 May 2007 12:46 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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HAhaha!! I loved the last line: "He was almost glad the two hadn't grown up together." LOL. Fantastic chpater. Hehe, I loved the part where Snape realized that his father had out smarted him.
| Title: What is this Feeling?
| 28 May 2007 12:35 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Awwww, great chapter! I loved it! :) The number of days that Tobias is away seems to change though. First he was leaving Saturday and coming back Tuesday. That's like 3 days. Then he says he'll be gone for a few days, and now with only a day or so left, he says he'll be back in a couple of days. You might want to look into that when it's being beta'd. :)
I really enjoyed the chapter! Glitter! LOL. And honey. oh, fun. XD
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