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Reviews For Brothers and Fathers
You need a beta reader too by the way. If you have one, fire them and get one who speaks English. Author's Response: The first few chapters of my story are not beta'd, chapters 9+ are however. And though you may not believe me Serentiy will not have a huge part in this story for quite sometime. I won't claim that she isn't a Mary-Sue, but despite this chapter and one other she has a minimal part in the story. I only ask that you give her and the story a chance. I haven't had the oppurtunity to post everything I have written on this site, but everything through chapter twelve is posted on fanfiction.net. Here is the exact website: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3487010/1/ As for having an obsesion with Serenity's apperance, she's the first non-snape related character I've had to describe so far, with the other's I tried to allow the readers imagination of what snape looked like to affect both Snape's father as well as Harry's new appearance. As I said before, all that I ask is that you give this story a chance to build. Thank you for the review. DaughterOfAres.
Author's Response: I apoligize for the typo's, but I now have a beta.
It´d be very sad if he gives up on Harry, but undestandable at the same time if he is an old person. I mean teenagers are dificult to dealt; there will be more arguments in the future and fightings too; young people (I include myself ;) are very energetics, they are moving and changing every second, and that`s dificult to follow... I´ll be waiting for the next update Keep writing Lynx_lw Author's Response: Thanks. I'm sure you'll enjoy the rest of the story, and thank you so much for reviewing.
Author's Response: Thanks. More is on the way.
Author's Response: More is on the way I promise. Also, I agree, Tobias is exactly what Harry needs.
Author's Response: Tobias will lighten up a bit, but there is a reason he's strict. Thanks for reviewing.
Author's Response: I'm glad you didn't give up on my story after the first chapter. Thank you for the review.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the story and I promise that all the chapters that have been beta'd are much better and not rushed. |
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