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Reviews For What is family?
You need to slow down the pace of your story and clarify things. Withholding clues can add suspense to a plot, but you still need to provide the reader with something to work with. I strongly recommend that you get a beta reader. A good beta will help you with your plot as well as help you correct the spelling errors. (and yes, you do have quite a few of those in your story.) I learned a lot from my beta readers, and my writing has improved because of them. Keep writing Author's Response: I know, I'm sorry. But I am determined to get better at spelling and grammer if it kills me! Well... maybe not of it kills me but you get the idea. ^^ Hmm, withholding too much? You think so? I only have one writing style but I can give it a shot I guess. My main problem with all that is that my story is written depending on a character's perspective. In other words, I can't tell you more than the character knows, you know? Although DoA mentioned putting more PoV's in the story so I might try it that way. Hadn't heard that opinion before hun so thank you. ^-^ *Collapses and whines for the floor* But I'm impatient.... I can't wait several days for a chapter to get back to me I want to post it soon as.... *Ends whining* Plus, she seems to be pretty busy lately... Maybe I could ask my friend.... *ponders* Oh right, review responce! Thank ya chuckyhun. ^-^ I'll keep writing. And thank you very much for your constructive critisism, I know I can learn much from past mistakes but only if someone cares to point me in the right direction. Lol <3
You don't have to post authors notes within the chapter though, warning about the gore and such. A warning at the top is sufficient. Authors notes in the chapter jar the readers. It doesn't work well. Author's Response: Sorry, I meant to get rid of those . . . I'll drop them though. They're annoying to write too. (only put them there for the really scweamish readers, but I don't think there are any) Thank thee hun! Love you too! xXxXx
Author's Response: O_o . . . There's a sadistic side to you isn't there? . . . ^^;;; Thank you hun! Love you much! XxXx |
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