| Title: Chapter 20
| 28 Dec 2020 11:59 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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I like the idea of their Switzerland, but if they carry on fighting it will not be neutral for long!
| Title: Chapter 20
| 17 Feb 2015 10:26 am
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| Reviewer: Anne (Anonymous)
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I enjoyed it. Interesting how you brought up the Snarry. But,both Harry and Sanpe are firmly in the camp of that is "improper." I do think you belabored the point a bit too much though. After all, neither of them are into fan fiction.
| Title: Chapter 20
| 19 Apr 2014 4:37 am
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| Reviewer: Kalof (Anonymous)
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This has probably been the most realistic portrayal of snape in any fanfiction I've read so far (and that's saying something!) Well done.
Sorry this review is so late, but life's been busy so until now I've had no time to stop in at the site.
This chapter had several topics brought up and I found it interesting to read. I actually found the fighting to be pretty funny, it was so petty, and I found myself smirking at their banter.
Poor Harry though, he felt a lot of frustration in this chapter. I loved the end though! Those last few comments were kind of cute/sweet :) Glad to see that they stopped arguing and got to neutral ground. There has been a lot of angst so far, and a lighter atmosphere was good.
I'll keep an eye out for your next chapter! And congratulations on your story got a tag, I enjoy reading it.
This chapter was well worth waiting for. I really like the way you are handling Harry and Severus' characters and epecially the development of their relationship. I'm looking forward to seeing more of this when your muse is cooperative.
I wound up rereading the entire story when you updated, and it was as good as I remembered. This chapter was brilliant - I love the ending, and the way Snape is trying, in his own way. Great job.
Oh, wow, I love that ending. It was awesome. Love this chapter, thanks for the update!
-Elise
ah - another great chapter! i am really enjoying these discussions (fights, negotiations) between snape and harry. it's great to see them both groping their way. i *loved* the way you ended this one. "Curious" indeed!
Interesting dialogue. I enjoy this story very much. However, seeing as your reviews are already full of praises, let me offer a few criticisms.
Snape, even one as changed as yours, would hardly say "Forgive my stupidity." He is a proud man, and takes his intelligence above all else. Stupidity is not the word here; you want something implying that a mistake was made (intelligent men can sometimes be mistaken, but are never stupid), with an undercurrent of insecurity and bitterness.
There is another point at which the logic doesn't quite flow. Snape says, "You thought I locked you up to punish you." His next sentence equates "getting back" at someone with punishing them. They are, I believe, quite different, and someone like Snape, especially given his history, would be quick to see the difference. Punishing someone requires a position of authority. An adult can punish a child, a professor can punish a student, Tobias and Vernon can punish Snape and Harry, respectively. Getting back at someone is retaliation, revenge. This is usually between equals, rivals, such as between Snape and James, or Harry and Malfoy. Punishment and revenge, while superficially similar, are very different concepts. While Harry, and perhaps even Snape, may not realize which one applies in this scenario, he/they should assume one way or the other, and not equate the two.
I hope this helps you! I wish you happy writing, as for your audience, it is happy reading, indeed.
Pax vobiscum,
Aethyr
| Title: Chapter 20
| 02 Jul 2008 10:55 pm
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| Reviewer: teri (Anonymous)
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i love it! poor dumbledore, everyone hates him. Including me in the context of this story. Can't wait for more!
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