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Reviews For A Place for Warriors
I particularly enjoyed this chapter. Snape is trying to do the right thing -- to build a relationship with Harry and yet give him some guidance and direction. Harry is understandably not ready to give any person, especially Snape I think, the power to discipline him. Most of the adults in his life, including Snape in the past, have abused that power. So he cannot envision a relationship other than friend or foe. I think, however, that you will do a wonderful job as future chapters enfold of showing how he comes to accept Snape as an adult looking out for him in all ways.
I have mixed feelings about Snape giving Harry this detention, I admit. And please know that this is not a criticism of your writing at all. I can see Snape reacting this way so it's very believable. He is both insecure and proud, and I think he, in particular, would be very sensitive about being shown respect. I also want to say that I taught third-grade for eight years and I have two children of my own, so I do think it's very important for young people to respect adults in general. But, all that being said, there is such a thing as mutual respect, too. A teacher also needs to respect their students, in the sense that they are human beings who deserve to be treated fairly and politely...not saying that they should be allowed to get away with things, but no child deserves to be mocked and emotionally abused the way Snape has treated Harry until very recently. Snape has been horrible and unfair to Harry for years...even he will admit that now. I think his former treatment of Harry was emotional abuse and even just a few chapters ago, he lashed out and struck Harry. I know that they're trying to move past all that and establish a better relationship, which is wonderful, but I guess I think Snape still needs to acknowledge how deeply he has harmed Harry and that he needs to make amends. He is insisting that Harry respect him as a professor, and acknowledge his authority...but a professor who abuses that authority as much as Snape has may not deserve the respect. I guess I just think Snape hasn't quite fully grasped that yet, and I think he should be a little more remorseful himself because his behavior towards Harry has been a hundred times worse than Harry's treatment towards him. But, like I said, please don't think I'm criticising your story or your writing, because Snape is still evolving and he still has a ways to go before he's really emotionally mature. And I do think he's struggling to figure out how to establish a relationship with Harry, too. It's unexplored territory for both of them. I also really like how you've portrayed Harry's confusion about how to accept an adult into his life, having a position of authority over him, without being abusive. That's very realistic. Another thing I like a lot is how close Harry, Ron, and Hermione are in your fic. I love the Trio. And it was very nice of Snape to give Harry the photo of his grandparents. I'm looking forward to more!
I´m curious if this story will develope more into the mentor/guardian or the comrade type. As is clear after this review I would prefer it to be comrades. You labelled it Misc which means everything is possible. I just can´t see your Harry to accept this `inequality´. Sure he wants to depend on an adult, but that doesn´t make it imperative for said adult to be a person of authority also. I do hope I could make my meaning clear and maybe even give you a little food for thought. In any case do please update soon!
"As long as he knows his place," Ron says, sounding both immature and dangerous at the same time.
its interesting that harry doesnt understand the concept of a parent, I like the way you have this all turning out! really makes a lot of sense i like how both ron and hermione are on harry's side with the whole snape and dumbledor thing great work you really need to work on updating
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