Potions and Snitches
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Reviews For The Bond of Trust
Title: Chapter 1: The Favor 06 Aug 2007 9:58 pm
Reviewer: Becky (Anonymous) [Report This]
    The 'Harry abuse' is a bit over the top and unrealistic. Also, I can't picture Snape being reduced to childish name-calling. Yes, he's sarcastic and insulting, but he's also intelligent and witty. He's capable of thinking of a better insult than 'pig.' It sounds like something a fourteen-year-old would think of.

    Author's Response:

    Yes, it is a bit over the top. And thanks. I'll look into changing those insults.

     

    Your criticism is appreciated.

     

    Ktoddhim

Title: Chapter 1: The Favor 05 Aug 2007 11:55 am
Reviewer: Geek6 (Signed) [Report This]
    Good start to a promising story. I've enjoyed it so far.

    One thing though.. you've two words that are obvious spell check mistakes.. thrown instead of throne.. and incite instead of insight.

    Other than those.. it's looking good..thanks for sharing.

    Author's Response:

    Ooo thanks. I'll fix those.

     

    Ktoddhim

Title: Chapter 1: The Favor 04 Aug 2007 12:05 pm
Reviewer: PotionsMaster90 (Signed) [Report This]
    I liked this alot! I'm wondering whats goingto happen next, but only you know that right? Update soon!
    -Potions

    Author's Response: Thanks! I shall update soon.rnrnKtoddhim
Title: Chapter 1: The Favor 18 Jul 2007 4:58 am
Reviewer: Alexis8907 (Signed) [Report This]
    Pretty good start so far. I suggest getting a beta reader to fix errors like 'wail' when it should have been 'whale'.

    Author's Response: Thanks lots!rn
Title: Chapter 1: The Favor 18 Jul 2007 2:54 am
Reviewer: LindseySnape (Signed) [Report This]
    Sounds like Severus is going to have a real inter battle with his conscience over poor Harry. Looking forward to their first meeting, excellent start. Keep up the great work, and please update soon. LES

    Author's Response: Thanks!!!

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