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Reviews For Word Up
Author's Response: Thanks!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad it was believable. I just couldn't see Harry acting any other way here.
Your Voldemort is wonderful. And I mean that in the absolutely-insanely-terrifyingly-evil sort of way. I think poor Harry is in for a rough go of it, isn't he? Author's Response: Yeah...Voldemort Rocks! >;)
Also, you may want to break up your paragraphs into smaller chunks. They're very difficult to read, as they're so big. Think of it as trying to listen to someone who rambles on and on without pausing, not even to take a breath. In this chapter, your longest 'paragraph' contained over 500 words. It could have been broken down into at least ten paragraphs. Take care, Rebecca Author's Response: Thanks for the review! 500 words really?! Ouch. When I get time, I'll go back and break it up. Looks like I write like I think. But I'm working on it. I worked on the paragraph size in later chapters because of some reviews so I hope you like them better. I'm not sure how to go about getting a beta but if you or someone you know would like to volunteer, let me know.
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