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Title: Chapter 2: From Bad To Worse...Much Worse 13 Sep 2007 11:50 pm
Reviewer: Syllva (Signed) [Report This]
    Good chapter.

    Author's Response: Thanks!
Title: Chapter 2: From Bad To Worse...Much Worse 20 Aug 2007 10:50 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    This chapter was handled very believably. I can see Harry sassing Dudley and Vernon kicking him out. And the way you have Harry handling the session with the Death Eaters is also believable. He wouldn't give up and I can see him tripping Wormtail so he wouldn't have to take the potion. And he certainly wouldn't trust Snape at this point.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I'm glad it was believable.  I just couldn't see Harry acting any other way here.
Title: Chapter 2: From Bad To Worse...Much Worse 28 Jul 2007 11:53 am
Reviewer: curlybean (Signed) [Report This]
    I'm not surprised that Vernon kicked him out, and I'm not surprised that Deatheaters were waiting for the exact moment the wards failed. I am, however, surprised that no one from the order was there to help Harry. Must have been Mundungus' turn to watch Harry again.

    Your Voldemort is wonderful. And I mean that in the absolutely-insanely-terrifyingly-evil sort of way. I think poor Harry is in for a rough go of it, isn't he?

    Author's Response: Yeah...Voldemort Rocks!   >;)
Title: Chapter 2: From Bad To Worse...Much Worse 27 Jul 2007 9:47 pm
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I like your story so far, but you need to get a beta reader. You have issues with grammar. Don't stop writing though, this story has promise. However, it needs to be edited.

    Also, you may want to break up your paragraphs into smaller chunks. They're very difficult to read, as they're so big. Think of it as trying to listen to someone who rambles on and on without pausing, not even to take a breath.

    In this chapter, your longest 'paragraph' contained over 500 words. It could have been broken down into at least ten paragraphs.

    Take care,
    Rebecca

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the review! 

    500 words really?!  Ouch.  When I get time, I'll go back and break it up.  Looks like I write like I think.  But I'm working on it.  I worked on the paragraph size in later chapters because of some reviews so I hope you like them better. 

    I'm not sure how to go about getting a beta but if you or someone you know would like to volunteer, let me know. 

Title: Chapter 2: From Bad To Worse...Much Worse 20 Jul 2007 4:40 am
Reviewer: Alexis8907 (Signed) [Report This]
    I really liked this chapter! Harry getting a few good shots at Dudley was very nice. Dudley deserved to get hit back after all his Harry hunting days. I especially liked when Harry managed to hit Bellatrix because she really is one evil... person. This line was great: "yes, I'll be displeased if you kill me too."

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