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Reviews For Word Up
Author's Response: They're almost as bad as the dreams where you jolt awake thinking you're falling. :) Glad you're enjoying the story.
I noticed this amusing mistake, that probably has been pointed out already: "Remus felt his heart sore." Should be "soar". Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked that. I have to admit that chapters six thru nine were not my best work. Not that I have much work to compare it with. LOL This is my first story ever. Oops! I'll go fix that some time before Wed. Thanks for catching that. I can just imagine what everyone must be thinking. Why would Remus' heart be sore? LOL
Just a little point out: "Remus felt his heart sore". I think it should be "soar" One more suggestion- try separating dialouge into new paragraphs like so: "Hello," said Harry. "Hi," said Ron. It makes it easier to follow the speakers when thier words are fully seperated. Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for the responses. I'll definitely be careful in the future with the dialogue and the spelling. Microsoft Word is great for spell checking but sore and soar just doesn't come up. I'll have to watch that. I was really nervous since I've never posted anything before but your reviews made me feel great! Whew! |
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