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Title: Chapter 14: Everyone Dies 02 Aug 2007 7:34 am
Reviewer: curlybean (Signed) [Report This]
    What an awful cliffie. How could you do that to us? Anyway, great chapter. Probably my favorite so far. Snape was just so perfect and poor Harry was just so off-footed by the whole encounter.

    I laughed at the idea of the two of them making a bet on who would off voldemort. Snape's autograph vs Harry's signed Chocolate Frog card. Very cute.

    Can't wait for the next chapter. Please don't make us wait too long.

    Author's Response:

    You know...it's surprisingly easy to do a cliffhanger like that.  I've been sitting here relishing the tension since posting.

     Thanks for the review!  That wager made me laugh too.  I'm so glad you liked it.

    Stay tuned...

Title: Chapter 14: Everyone Dies 02 Aug 2007 3:18 am
Reviewer: lunaz (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Oh man that was just cruel. My eyes about popped out of my head when I saw what I thought was the ending to your story. But my heart started beating again when I read the works "Just Kidding!" You were kidding right.......Looking forward to the next chapter.

    Author's Response:

    Am I cruel and evil?  I prefer to call it Light-Side challenged.  ;)

Title: Chapter 14: Everyone Dies 02 Aug 2007 2:13 am
Reviewer: Dismal Air (Signed) [Report This]
    Oooh, that was an abrupt terrifying ending (for now) - Have to say you've hooked me on this storyline and its Snape mystique. It's unusual for Snape to be Mr. Sweetness towards Harry so his sudden departure from it is oddly refreshing.

    I do hope you have more up your sleeve in terms of chapters :)

    Author's Response:

    Yay!  You're hooked.  Let's see if I can reel you in now. 

    Mr. Sweetness?  That's just...yucky!  LOL

Title: Chapter 14: Everyone Dies 02 Aug 2007 2:08 am
Reviewer: Eniledam (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wow!!!! what a way to end it! please update it soon! I can't wait to see what happens next!

    ...hm... I bet Snape was casting a different spell but was making a point that even if you say a spell, it's the intent behind it that makes a spell what it is. Am I right?

    Please update soon!

    Author's Response:

    Hmmm....   :)

Title: Chapter 14: Everyone Dies 02 Aug 2007 1:49 am
Reviewer: Alexis8907 (Signed) [Report This]
    WHAT?? That ending is twisted and cruel! Surely Snape isn't sending the spell at him? Perhaps something nearby? I know that Harry wont die becuase well that would kill the story and you wouldn't do that. At least I hope you wouldnt...

    I think it'd be funny if Harry grew his hair back overnight like he did when he was younger. :)

    Author's Response:

    Hehehehe...Hahahahaha...Mwuhahahahaha!

    Oh yeah, thanks for the review!  Sorry about all the evil laughter.  I've been having fits of them all day.  :)  Hehehehe

Title: Chapter 13: Pent Up Aggressions 30 Jul 2007 9:28 pm
Reviewer: Anais (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Very, very interesting. Keep posting! I'm anxious to know what comes next. Well written.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you very much!  I promise not to abandon this fic.  It's almost all planned out, I just need to write most of it.  I just hope it stays interesting. 

Title: Chapter 13: Pent Up Aggressions 30 Jul 2007 8:48 pm
Reviewer: WannaBeSlytherin (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I SINCERELY thank you for posting this story. It is one of the best characterizations of Severus that I have read. This is exactly how I want him to be - dangerous, focused, alone - a true warrior wizard.

    Also, the growing care/respect between Severus and Harry is well described.

    I found this story today (July 30) and read it in one go. I am pleased that you have taken the grammar and paragraph critique to heart. Your story is getting better and better, style-wise.

    I would really love to see Severus start teaching Harry what true defense is. The DA was all about children teaching children and that can never be the same as what an experienced wizard could teach.

    Love Severus' book!!! Would want a copy of it!! Have you thought about branching out??! :)

    Looking forward to the next installment.
    Sincerely,
    WannaBeSlytherin
    Stockholm, Sweden

    Author's Response:

    Wow!  I loved your review.  It was the perfect thing to come home to after work.  I absolutely agree with the sentiments on the DA.  This is a grown up war and deserves a grown up treatment.  More on that soon.  Yeah, I really loved that book of Severus' too. 

    Snape is such a bad ass and I wouldn't have him any other way.

    Thanks for the review and enjoy!

Title: Chapter 3: So...You Don't Trust Me? 30 Jul 2007 3:16 pm
Reviewer: Foolish Wishmaker (Signed) [Report This]
    Very, very good. Again, I really love your Snape. I can't wait to see what happens next... sadly I have to leave for work, so I can't start the next chapter. Darn those cliffhangers!

    the boy who lived
    Should be capitalized. And possibly separated by dashes, although that's up to you.

    deatheaters
    Capitalized and two separate words.

    anyways
    Despite rampant misuse, there is no such word. The word you want is "anyway."

    Misspellings of canon words and names is always more irritating than any other misspellings or grammar problems. I once got crucified for misspelling "Krycek" on an X-Files mailing list... and it wasn't even in a fic!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the review and thank you very much for the corrections.  I've got a beta now...YAY! and we're going back over all the chapters and fixing them.  I'll watch for those mistakes.  She's already fixed the 'Death Eaters' for me and probably others.  I'll go back and check now.  I had no idea anyways wasn't even a word!  Learn something new everyday.  :)

    Thanks and enjoy!

Title: Chapter 1: Warnings 30 Jul 2007 2:21 pm
Reviewer: Foolish Wishmaker (Signed) [Report This]
    This is an awesome start. I LOVE this Snape. He's just canon enough to be believable, but much more edgy. I can totally see it. Plus I really like how you've set up his place in the Order.

    Now, a couple of things I noticed:

    "Albus Dumbledore was a man that"
    Things THAT, People WHO. It should be "Dumbledore was a man who."

    "a man that did wear his heart"
    Same as above. Should be who, not that.

    dark lord
    Should be always capitalized. It's his title and stands in for his name.

    auror
    Also should be capitalized... not for any really good reason, but because Rowling capitalizes it.

    DeathEater
    Always two words, not one.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  I mean that.  I'll get those changes in sometime today or tonight.  I really appreciate that you let me know the mistake and why it should be fixed.  You're a good teacher.

    I can't say enough about how happy I am you like my Snape.  I hope I can keep him up to those standards.  I am definitely in the 'Snape is one scary guy' camp.

     Thanks and enjoy.

Title: Chapter 13: Pent Up Aggressions 30 Jul 2007 4:54 am
Reviewer: LindseySnape (Signed) [Report This]
    This was a really good chapter, it's so sad about the little boy though and hopefully the family will be okay. It's so intresting that you had Severus write DADA books, it's just so different. Curious to see what's going to happen next, it would be cool if Sev would teach Harry about DADA, like how to duel or something. Keep up the good work and update soon. LES

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the review!  Glad you liked it. 

    That was sad wasn't it?  And his poor brother!  I don't think I appreciated ihow sad it was until I reread the part where Snape mentions that Samuel followed Nathan around.  Then it hit me.  OMG, I just killed a child (literatively I mean...did I just make that word up?)


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