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Reviews For Word Up
Also, you may want to break up your paragraphs into smaller chunks. They're very difficult to read, as they're so big. Think of it as trying to listen to someone who rambles on and on without pausing, not even to take a breath. In this chapter, your longest 'paragraph' contained over 500 words. It could have been broken down into at least ten paragraphs. Take care, Rebecca Author's Response: Thanks for the review! 500 words really?! Ouch. When I get time, I'll go back and break it up. Looks like I write like I think. But I'm working on it. I worked on the paragraph size in later chapters because of some reviews so I hope you like them better. I'm not sure how to go about getting a beta but if you or someone you know would like to volunteer, let me know.
please update soon Author's Response: You got it! Thanks
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I was waiting for your review actually. I've been careful to watch the length of the paragraphs and the dialogue spaces since you mentioned it. I like it much better this way too. Thanks. I'm especially glad to hear you like the story still. A few more chapters and then I promise...ACTION!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'll get them posted as fast as I can. Several are in the works right now and since I tend to write out of chronological order, they'll go faster when I get to later chaps that are already mostly written. I just realized though...this is going to be a looonnng story! Yikes!
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks so much. I'm already working on the next few chapters so expect updates within the next week!
Author's Response: I'm glad that it's believable. I don't mind reading stories where Snape goes out of character if there's a reason for it or a logical chain of events leading up to it. I really think he genuinely dislikes Harry but takes his responsibilities seriously all the same. Good observation. I had to think about it for a while but I really do tell it from a third person trying to describe their thoughts than anything. I'll have to toy around with that. Thanks so much for the review.
Author's Response: Oooh, thanks! I'll have to check that out. He's such a forceful character that I couldn't help thinking of him this way. I'm curious if the thread agrees with my later take on matters. More to come but...DH comes out tonight and since I work at a book store AND have to read the book, this week will be hectic. In fact, I should be getting into costume for the party right now. Yikes! Enjoy!
Author's Response: The title is actually just the lyrics of a song I was listening to when I was saving the story for the first time. Korn redoing "What's the word up." I've been working on an idea for that title but I haven't written it in yet. Thanks again for the review. I work at a bookstore (Borders) so I'll be extremely busy this weekend and into the next. Tonight's the big party and I'll be working in costume so I won't be updating until probably next week some time, not that anyone's gonna have time to read it anyway with DH coming out. YAY!
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