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Reviews For Walk the Shadows
Author's Response: Thanks!
Author's Response: It's a long road back, but the recovery is possible, so yes, some semblance of normal, but his life is forever altered, to be sure. Thanks for the review!
Author's Response: I'm impressed with the grammar and spelling . . . Word (TM) is your friend! And so is writing a lot. And reading a lot. I also belong to a professional writers group (for my orginal fiction) and do a lot of critiques, which helps, too. Minding someone else's grammar can be good for learning it yourself. :-)
Skittles to you! Author's Response: Mmmmmmm, can they be the sour skittles? I luff them. :-)
Author's Response: Hehe, crooked teeth. They may really be perfectly fine, though, and Harry's just being mean . . . you know, in case Snape reads his journal. ;-)
Interesting that Harry had a relapse - completely realistic. How long was he in that state for? I like the way you describe him becoming shut off like that with just a mere thought. It's so realistic, especially when you compare it to something such as a panic attack. A single thought can set it off and you just have to wait until the hyperventilating stops before you can move on. And it won't stop until it good and well feels like it (trust me, I know, lol). I assume it's just as terrifying for Harry. Good work! Keira Author's Response: Hi Kiera, thanks for the review! Harry was in a dissociative state for about 30 minutes. It's not a hugely long time for these sorts of things, though considerable. And of course, for Harry, it's an excruciatingly long time to be stuck in a horrible memory.
Really beautiful line. Harry was broken, Severus reminded himself. And he did not like to toy with broken things. Another wonderful line, someone else also mentioned I think. One thing that you do so well is to have Snape both very patient during Harry's flashbacks, panic attacks, etc. -- he apparently knows something of what Harry is going through from his own experience -- and yet impatient with what might seem more run-of-the-mill examples of Harry being what Snape would see as lazy or unthinking. You write this kind of recovery piece better than almost any I've read (and I've read a lot of them). Author's Response: Thank you, wynnleaf! As I've mentioned, I've had experience with these kinds of post trauma disorders, and am just glad I seem to be portraying them adequately. And Snape, well. He's sort of an enigma all around, isn't he? I'm glad that the dichotomy of his character is coming out in the writing as I intended. Thanks again, --rachel
Author's Response: Hi pkrosche, thanks for the review! I'm not really sure what you mean by the Remus/Snape relationship being off, as they've not had much interaction onstage. Do you mean the way they talk about each other? Always open to suggestions, me . . .
I think it really describes the kind of person Snape is. He's unrelenting at times, but knows when to soften. I think Occlumency lessons will go SO much better if Snape gives Harry tools to help him master it...and possesses a little patience. lol. It'll be interesting to see how these lessons go. I loved this chapter. I think you're doing a really great job with the Harry's subtle, gradual progress. His slight relapses make it only seem more realistic. His vision/flashback made my heart ache, but you have a way of writing the emotional scenes without being graphic, and I think it takes real talent to do that. :) Can't wait 'til Thursday! Author's Response: Thanks, Jade! I honestly don't do graphic very well, and have always found that if left to the reader's imagination, all the blank spots will be filled in to each person's own comfort level, you know? And yes, the Occlumency lessons have always been a source of anguish for both these characters, but hopefully not too much so when I get through with them. ;-) |
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