It’s amusing to see Sirius trying to rile Snape up. It’s lovely that they want to get to know the Harry they have with them for who he really is.
| Title: Illness
| 29 Jun 2019 9:43 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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This is such an interesting story thank you
Where Sev is telling Sirius “You will refrain yourself from referring to me as your lovebug, Black...,” there's a small correction needed.
He could say one of two phrases.
Either: "You will refrain from calling me" (WITHOUT using the word 'yourself');
Or change the verb: "You will RESTRAIN yourself from calling me".
"Restrain" is a reflexive verb, meaning it gets used with a "-self"word (oneself, yourself, himself, etc.).
The verb "refrain" is not reflexive, so it does not get used with a helping "self" word.
You're a good writer with good ideas. Not being critical here--just helping you fine-tune your skills. Forgive my impertinence; I mean it in a friendly way.
Author's Response: Well thank you, I really appreciate that! I'll fix that error as soon as I can and again, thank you for pointing it out to me.
thank you for updating again! i like this story :)
i like peanut butter, and if Harry doesn't then i SHUN him!!! SHUN
Very nice chapter.
This Severus really is nice and loving towards this Harry. I find myself hoping that Harry will stay here, but then what will happen to the wizarding world that he left behind?
| Title: Illness
| 03 Jul 2008 1:03 am
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| Reviewer: Nightshade (Anonymous)
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