Another excellent chapter! I hope Snape meets with the Dursley's soon since that should be rather entertaining...
I agree with Caramello that the changing pov's are more enjoyable when only certain bits and pieces of the previous scene are redone in the different pov. This particular chapter was particularly well done, giving us a whole new scene of Snape watching Harry in Slytherin. I love reading Snape's conflicting emotions.
| Title: Chapter 8
| 06 Sep 2007 5:55 am
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| Reviewer: lilseverus (Anonymous)
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Sounds like Snape isn't very confident about getting Harry away from the Dursleys. Stupid Dumbledore. I bet he never lifted a finger to try to get Snape help, either, when Snape was a student.
I loved Harry helping Millicent.
Harry on the Slytherin Quidditch team? Yey! I like the idea of Snape getting him a broom. I wonder who Gryffindor will have as Seeker. Or if Draco will make the team, ever.
I'm enjoying the double POV scenes, but more so when it's like this and it's only overlapping just a bit, and not the whole thing. The whole chapter overlap can be good for intriguel chapters, but for the most part, I like to see the story progress further into the plot as opposed to needing to see in exact detail what the other is thinking. But I'm still liking it, don't get me wrong :)
I like that Severus is still conflicted about Harry. Still confused on what to make or think of him. I'm glad he's got his situation pinpointed and that he's no longer thinking him a pampered prince, but I can't wait for him to stop thinking irritable thoughts in his direction. Of course, it's realistic and I'm enjoying the inner conflict... I just long for the day :D
Great job!
Author's Response: Hi Caramello, thanks for the review! Yeah, I think I'm only going to overlap pov a little; it was getting too weird to have nearly whole chapters repeat. Besides, I can throw tidbits in about their differing thoughts about the same situations into later chapters, without repeating big chunks. On Severus' attitude . . . I don't see him ever not thinking irritable thoughts about, well everyone. He's kind of an irritable guy. ;-) Thanks again for the feedback!
| Title: Chapter 8
| 06 Sep 2007 4:38 am
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| Reviewer: JessieG (Anonymous)
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Another lovely chapter! I know that I haven't reviewed before on this story, but I promise that i will from now on! ^_^
I loved "Brat Who Could Apparently Make Bloody Rainbows Bend to His Will" Where do you come up with these names? There great!
Your right this chapter is a bit short, but I trust that you will make the next chaper longer (hint hint)
Great chapter, I'm glad that you put in the conversation that Severus and Poppy had about Harry, and what they were going to do. I'm really glad that you didn't make all the Slytherins mini malfoy snobs with loads of money. Glad to see that Harry made seeker, and strangely happy that Severus gave him and Malfoy both detention. Keep up the great work, and please update again soon. LES
| Title: Chapter 8
| 06 Sep 2007 4:31 am
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| Reviewer: JMGodfreyIII (Anonymous)
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"Severus witnessed and the visions of the Quidditch Cup now dancing madly in his mind" teeheehee XD
Amazing! Personally I like this one more than Walk the Shadows and hope you update real soon!
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