| Title: Chapter 4
| 08 Oct 2009 6:57 pm
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| Reviewer: JAWorley (Anonymous)
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I think it would almost be better to try to show each of their perspectives in the same chapter at the time of the incident rather than alternating back and forth. It will take you much longer to get through the story if you have two chapters for one set of events.
| Title: Chapter 2
| 08 Oct 2009 6:09 pm
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| Reviewer: JAWorley (Anonymous)
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I like it, but the only thing that kind of annoys me is the use of the word "snakes," instead of students. I could see using it once or twice, but it gets plain and boring after a while... almost like when a writer just puts "he said, he said, he said," over and over instead of switching it up. Just my thought is all. I enjoyed seeing what Slytherin would run like as opposed to Gryffindor, but I feel sad for Harry already knowing what he will miss out from in the other house.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 23 Sep 2009 12:34 am
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| Reviewer: Tim (Anonymous)
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I love this piece to bits. Going to my memories and I hope you continue with a second story!
please please please start the next one soon. PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love this story!! You do such a good job of keeping to the characters, but still molding them into something you created. Great job, please update soon!
Just re reading the fic, that's all.
Poor Harry! But I still have to love Snape. He and Harry just have different understandings...and a well developed grudge on one side. Nice chapter!
Poor little Harry! At least Draco and Teddy are being nice...for now...
I absolutely LOVE Snape's names for Harry! The whole, "Boy-Who-Lived to Annoy" was fantasic!
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