This is very interesting. I like your take on the characters -- some writers tend to lose Harry's... well, *Harryness* when they do resorting stories. I'm happily awaiting the next chapter.
Oh. Poor, poor Harry. Snape IS cruel, though I can understand why. Still. Poor kid, that was a low blow.
I hope that he gets his new clothes soon. Good job with this! Snape is very much in character. I can't wait until he learns more. Great job on even the daily potions and thoughts. :) Thanks for the update!
| Title: Chapter 4
| 29 Aug 2007 8:54 am
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| Reviewer: xikum (Anonymous)
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Permission to start throttling Snape? This is outrageous. He is truly blind, with regards to Harry - to a degree that itself borders on abuse, and is well into mild neglect, as he is the one who is to take care of Harry now, at least as the Head of House. He is not so bad as the Dursleys, but they are in a class by themselves. A teacher with such long experience - and especially his own personal history - surely would recognize signs of abuse & neglect!
Good story! I'm really liking it - please keep it up!
Can't wait to see what comes of Snape's planned visit to Harry's house... :)
| Title: Chapter 4
| 29 Aug 2007 7:19 am
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| Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous)
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I always feel sorry for Harry until someone gets a clue. Let's hope Snape will eventually.
| Title: Chapter 4
| 29 Aug 2007 6:09 am
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| Reviewer: JMGodfreyIII (Anonymous)
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Severus is being an absolute butt... and I'm loving it MUHAHAHA XD
The description of Harry hunched over the cauldrons was really vivid. It made my heart ache for him...poor thing. I really loved the last scene where Harry was having his nightmare, and I could tell Snape was concerned even though he assigned another detention.
This was a really good chapter. I can't help but laugh at all of the "Brat who..." statements that Snape comes up with. Although, I feel so sorry for Harry :(
Good chapter! I like your idea of alternating between Snape's POV and Harry's.
I like the idea of alternating POV's every once in a while, but not for each chapter. That could get pretty old after a while, lol. I enjoyed seeing where Snape was coming from on this first day back, however. Makes things much clearer. I still don't quite get how he was half asleep while yelling at Harry, lol, but I can see how he thinks he gave him the bruise. And that moment of guilt... PERFECT.
Infected scar? YUCK. But a neat touch all the same. Can't wait for more :D
Author's Response: Yeah, I don't know if the POV shift thing will work for the whole story, but I thought I'd try it out for a while anyway. If it gets too cumbersome, I trust folks to let me know if I haven't guessed it already, and I'll give it up quick. :-) Thanks for the feedback!
| Title: Chapter 4
| 29 Aug 2007 2:35 am
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| Reviewer: midnight rain (Anonymous)
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Awesome chapter!! Update when you can!!
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