There are some intriguing ideas here, but so many mangled sentences and typos that it was hard reading. It should be interesting to find out what Harry is supposed to be now and who the imposter is.
| Title: Kitsune at End of the Tunnel
| 25 Aug 2007 7:23 pm
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| Reviewer: midnight rain (Anonymous)
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Awesome story!!!! Hope you can update soon!!! It puts a new twist on things!!!
Very, very good start, can't wait until you update.
Odd... but good! I'm looking forward to more.
If possible, get a beta reader to go over it and correct some of the grammar issues. Or just try reading aloud to yourself, since that often helps to catch mistakes.
| Title: Kitsune at End of the Tunnel
| 24 Aug 2007 9:41 pm
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| Reviewer: Bratling (Signed)
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Very interesting. I'd like to know who the fake Harry is... Looking forward to your next update.
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