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Title: To Play the Game 13 Jan 2008 6:36 am
Reviewer: celestialuna (Signed) [Report This]
    good chapter.

    Author's Response: Thanks!
Title: To Play the Game 13 Jan 2008 5:15 am
Reviewer: Tigress93 (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow. Great update. I was very excited to wake up and see it!

    I love this chapter. Your story is becoming even more creative as you go on. I like the way you have McGonagall and Tobias seeing their memories...And the facts they used to prove they were real made me laugh. (Which is amazing, considering their situation.)
    Poor Severus! Losing your father and brother at the same time...I can't wait to see what his revelation was...And what that creature was! Looking forward to your next update.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks!

    You'll see more memories in the next chapter.

    I felt bad for Severus too. Even though I'm the one torturing him.

    You'll soon find out what the creature is.

    Thanks for the review!

Title: To Play the Game 12 Jan 2008 10:20 pm
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed) [Report This]
    Sorry I didn't review earlier...busy with writing and my wretched job. lol. Anyway, have I ever mentioned that you've got the suspense thing down perfectly? I love how you write in short, powerful sentences. I also like how you switch rapidly between scenes. It keeps the action alive in your story. Some wonderful description in this chapter:

    "He smelt vivid long forgotten aromas. He felt the cold, slick floor. His mouth tasted dry."

    **Simple, yet brilliant. I just love it.

    I can't wait until the next chapter! You've really kept yourself busy with all of these re-writes and re-posts and, of course, your own story :) Keep up the great work!

    Author's Response:

    No worries, as long as you review I could care less when.

    Suspense, for me is easier to write I think. With suspense I can just start typing and everything falls into place. With more emotional scenes I'm always worried about over doing it. Speaking of suspense...you plan on updating...when? :P

    My short powerful sentences I blame on George Orwell. In an essay he wrote (Five Rules for Effective Writing) he list some very common sense things, but at the very end the last rule is to abandon all the rule in order not to write something "completely barbarous." When I was in high school, I was always taught just the opposite. The rules of writing had to be followed to the letter. Big words and long sentences convey more then easy words and short sentences. George Orwell's esay changed my mind.

    Also, I confess, I'm one of those really annoying people who has to be doing something. Plus I live on four hours of sleep a night.

    Thanks for the fantastic review!

Title: To Play the Game 12 Jan 2008 4:57 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

    Ok, deep breathe. If it terrified Tobias, I don't ever want to face it Even as I realized he was seeing a memory, that was still terrifying.

    Thank you (now that my heart has jumped back into my chest)

    Author's Response:

    lol

    I wouldn't won't to face anything that terrified Tobias either. *shudders*

    Thanks for the review!

Title: To Play the Game 12 Jan 2008 11:14 am
Reviewer: April (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Thanks for updating. I really like this chapter. Poor Sev to lose both his father and brother. I wonder what he came up with and what the pattern is. I can't wait for your next udpat so plz update soon.

    Author's Response:

    I apologize for not updating sooner, but between the holidays and work...*sigh*

     Glad you enjoyed the chapter. You'll have to wait and see what Sev came up with.

    Thanks for the review!

Title: To Play the Game 12 Jan 2008 7:19 am
Reviewer: Elise_Malfoy (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, that was great! I love the suspense, poor Harry! And poor Tobias and McGonnagal!
    Can't wait for the next chapter!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks!

    I have many more plans for everyone. *grins evily*

     Thanks for the review! I'l update as soon as possible.

Title: Purple People Eater 08 Jan 2008 10:08 pm
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    very good workk I enjoyed both stories and await the next chapter, congrats on a work well done

    Author's Response: Thanks!
Title: The Only Thing to Fear 04 Jan 2008 12:12 am
Reviewer: Just_A_Reader (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Ok, chapters have been super this far, but this one takes the crown! XD

    The emotions, the terrible revenge ;), the Headmaster and his scones. LOL! The very nice brotherly moments. ^^

    Author's Response:

    Thanks!

    I had to add the scones. :)

    Thanks for the review!

Title: Purple People Eater 21 Dec 2007 6:35 am
Reviewer: LTJG Brown (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This creature sounds a bit like the door pretending to be walls (or was it walls pretending to be doors?), as mentioned in Harry's first year, only far more malicious. Actually, it sounds like the pretending whosits meets the basilisk in that it can move around and has a thirst for blood.
    The story is going GREAT! I sat down and read through both stories this evening, and I'm now horribly impatient to have the next chapter out! I must say, as an American Navy brat, I like the Captain very much; he reminds me of one of my teachers!

    Author's Response:

    I can't tell you anything about the creature (even though I'm dying to) because it would ruin the surprise.

     I'm glad you like my story, when I first posted I never thought it would be this popular. The Captain seems to be a very popular character, again, I didn't think anyone would like him when I first posted (even though he's one of my favorite characters). I'm also glad that he's realistic enough to remind you of a real person.

    Thanks for the review! I'll update as soon as possible.

Title: Purple People Eater 21 Dec 2007 2:21 am
Reviewer: Tigress93 (Signed) [Report This]
    To think I've been ignoring this story...my. I found Brothers and Fathers last night, and wouldn't go to sleep until I finished it. And today I got to read this one! You're doing a great job.
    You sure know how to keep people in suspense, don't you? The monster is rather scary! Tell us what it is? And then just when we think we're getting an answer, you make it attack McGonagall! (I think. That is what happened, right?)
    Anyway, keep going and update soon!

    Author's Response:

    Yes, the creature did attack McGonagall. I'm glad you liked Brothers and Fathers. I'm really proud of some of it, but the first several chapter need to be redone.

    I can't tell you what the monster is. That would ruin the surprise.

    Thanks for the review!


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