| Title: Chapter 19
| 25 Jun 2008 5:44 am
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| Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous)
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Sirius' POV was brilliant, most notably the Dursleys and the 'vely-tision'
Thank you for the pink lemonade and chocolate fudge brownie. They went along very well with the chapter. I'm on tenterhooks to see what happens next, though. Sirius is really---um, I think the word is obsessive---about Severus isn't he? And of course, is seeing everything that happens through a very biased point of view. Excellent characterization and descriptions. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
I think you did a wonderful job on portraying Sirius here! I do feel sorry for him, even though I know he's so mistaken and I hope he isn't able to kidnap Harry away from Sev...he would just be so terrified.
But, you've managed to portray Sirius sympathetically, to me anyway. It is obvious that he really loves Harry and wants to protect him. He's just so very wrong about Severus.
It is too bad that he didn't pay more attention to the Weasley boys' conversation...he seems to have either missed or totally discounted how Bill said that it was obvious how much Severus loved Harry. While he's observing Harry, he really should pay more attention to Harry's demeanor and not just what he's doing...maybe he could have seen that Harry wasn't frightened of Severus.
But unfortunately, Sirius' and Severus' opinions and beliefs about one another were set long ago and neither of them is going to be very open to realising that he was wrong, I'm afraid.
It looks more trouble is on the way. I'm looking forward to the next chapter here, and on your other storied. I hope you'll feel well and feel like writing! Happy summer!
Great chapter - I love the way you show how Sirius feels, and it's pretty easy to understand where he's coming from. Thanks for the update XD
| Title: Chapter 18
| 02 May 2008 9:34 am
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| Reviewer: jpottermalfoy (Anonymous)
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I've just found your 'Whelp' series yesterday, and have just now finished with what you have written so far. These stories are wonderfully written! There have been many chapters where I've soaked tissues while reading about poor Harry.
Snape seems to be developing quite nicely as a new parent to a 7 year old child with, well, basically mental disabilities. Emotional disabilities at the very least. And considering that he was abused himself as a child, I think Snape is doing a very good job. I can't stand the stories where Snape all of a sudden knows how to be the perfect father/guardian to a disturbed Harry-it's very unrealistic. That might sound a bit funny, considering that the entire Harry Potter universe is actually fantasy, but for the most part fanfiction writers try for a realistic feel in their characters.
Thank you for writing such a wonderful story, and I hope you are able to update again soon.
its great to see another chapter! cant wait for more
great chapter, harry is having a fairly good time helping with potions and messing about at the burrow and hearing news from hogwarts is always good
| Title: Chapter 18
| 15 Apr 2008 10:27 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Yay!! An update! I liked the pleasant movement of this chapter. Though it was laced with tension, it moved smoothly and was very nice. I like that Harry isn't all terrified of the possibility of Sirius yet -- I really like that. He needs to be able to be a kid for once, lol.
Great job!
Good chapter! I'm happy you found time to update! I have a feeling something is going to happen soon so hopefully you will be able to update again soon!
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