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Reviews For Evolution
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Many authors who write stories of this stripe choose to make Snape the only reasonable adult in a sea of stupidity or indifference. I'm glad you chose instead to make *all* of the teachers as concerned for Harry as Severus is. It seems much more probable your way, in that Dumbledore appears to be the odd man out. I would, however, take it into consideration that what the Professors are doing is highly illegal. *All* of them could easily lose their jobs. While I understand that they might proceed anyway, this possibility should be taken into account, mentioned more than a vague 'we could get in trouble'. Severus is basically guilty of kidnapping. He could go to Azkaban. Where would Harry be then? I think about this because I am in a similar situation with a student of mine right now. I imagine what would happen if I decided to spirit her away for four months and hope no-one noticed. I imagine it would not go well. Of course, I don't have magic on my side, but still...
A very minor correction: It's 'either/or - neither/nor'. So when Snape is asking Harry what disguise he wishes to keep to, 'or' should be changed to 'nor' in: "No one has seen us yet, except for Mercup, of course, and he will neither care nor comment if we change."
I just love Mercup, she sounds so cute. Oh wait, he or she? No matter, love the story!
I just love Mercup, she sounds so cute. Oh wait, he or she? No matter, love the story!
I just love Mercup, she sounds so cute. Oh wait, he or she? No matter, love the story! |
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