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Title: Chapter 12 18 Feb 2022 2:11 am
Reviewer: Lilia (Signed) [Report This]
    Loving this !
Title: Chapter 12 15 Feb 2012 11:19 pm
Reviewer: Lady Destiny (Signed) [Report This]
    Points for Snape!
Title: Chapter 12 28 Nov 2009 8:21 pm
Reviewer: naru894 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    this is one of the best snape personifications i´ve encountered.
Title: Chapter 12 07 Mar 2008 11:49 pm
Reviewer: SnowStalker (Signed) [Report This]
    Wonderful story! I tend to be wary of fics that have corporal punishment; while I'm not against the concept, I've tried to read a few, and they were just poorly done...but if the plot summary sounds good, I'll give the fic a try, and I must say that I am definitely pleased with this fic--it's very enjoyable, and I found myself laughing this chapter as I read Snape saying things that I've heard my parents (usually my mom, though), say: "Don't you roll your eyes at me, I'll...[insert whatever she felt appropriate at the time]" or "And so help me, if you don't do as I say [it was usually more specific, but you get the idea...] I will give you the spanking of your life!" *chuckles* I can't even count the number of times my siblings and I were given those, and similar, threats when we were children...my brother was the one who usually ended up finding out that my parents were actually serious, and I managed (most of the time) to learn from his mistakes. Anyway, this is very well done, and I've enjoyed it immensely. Normally, I don't review until I get to the last chapter posted, and then I'll review every chapter after that, but I just had to say something after this chapter! Also, I wanted to point out that "opaque" does not mean "heavy"...it can mean "dense," but usually means "not transparent." For instance, a stone wall is opaque; a normal (not frosted, stained, or any other special type of glass) window is not opaque. I just thought I'd point that out. *grins* Ok, now I'm off to read the rest of the story! Thank you for the wonderful fic!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the wonderful review!  The reason I had Snape describe 'opaque' as 'heavy' is because the word 'dense' wouldn't have made much sense to a twelve year old.  I used it once in a ninth grade class, and the kids were like... Huh?  lol.

    I'm really, really glad you decided to give my story a chance!  I know that there are a mantra of poorly-written stories that contain corporal punishment, although, I must say that this site has quite a few well-written and enjoyable ones.  I just try to make my story as realistic as possible, and I approach Harry's character from a true twelve-year-old's perspective.  I know he retrieved the Sorcerer's stone...blah blah blah...  But seriously.  He's twelve.  And I try to just make him out to be a kid.  ;) 

    I do hope you continue reading my story, as I'm anxious to see what you think about it by the end!  Thanks again for the encouraging feedback!

Title: Chapter 12 14 Dec 2007 5:09 pm
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) [Report This]
    I really like this chapter. I think this story gets better and better as you go. I look forward to reading more and I can't wait to see what Snape decides to do with the huge snake that keeps slithering around.

    You Rock!

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  You know, I feel like it's easier to write each chapter as I go, which is a good thing, I suppose.  I have plans for the basilisk, but sometimes when I write, I tweak a bit here and there from the original plan.  So we'll see... lol. 

    I really appreciate your constant support of my story.  Your reviews always cheer me up :) 

    Thanks again!

Title: Chapter 12 10 Dec 2007 4:38 am
Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I really liked this chapter. I think Snape was well down. He is mellowing appropriately as time goes on with Harry, I think.

    I liked the concern he shows and that he he let Harry take the book to read.

    I can't think of anything you're missing. Just keep it coming!

    Author's Response:

    Thank you for reading and reviewing!  Yeah...gradually mellowing is a good description of Snape.  And I'm so glad you put it that way, because I really am not intending for this story to be a ten on the mush-factor... lol.

    P.S. I am planning on reading your story from start to finish as soon as I get a few hours to lock myself away and read ;)

Title: Chapter 12 09 Dec 2007 11:14 pm
Reviewer: Just_A_Reader (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Another great chapter. I still think you have Snape nailed. It would be awesome if Snape could teach him some DADA, but discussions are good too. I wonder if Harry will get more assertive to Lockhart, if he knows more about the subject then the 'professor'. XD

    So, when's the next attack coming up? I can't wait for the next time Harry hears the Basilisk. ^^

    Author's Response:

    As with Snape, he'd be hesitant to teach a 12 yr old any kind of defense since he takes it so seriously; however, we'll just have to see... ;)

    Thanks for reviewing!  I'm relieved that Snape is still in character.  It gets more challenging as the chapters progress, but so far it seems to be working :)

Title: Chapter 12 09 Dec 2007 9:08 pm
Reviewer: TrustSnape (Signed) [Report This]
    Lovely chapter. Probably the best detention Harry has ever served. I love your Snape. He's just the perfect combination of total jerk and human being and the way he is, dare I say, warming up to Harry is wonderful.

    My favorite part this chapter has to be when Snape warned Harry not to disappoint him. I had to pause and 'aww' a bit. It was thoroughly sweet. Harry's reaction of mild shock was perfect as well.

    Thank you for the update. I'm looking forward to the next one.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you for such a great review!  I'm really trying to take the "warming up to Harry" thing slowly, as it would be quite out of character not to. 

    A lot of people seemed to really like Snape telling Harry not to disappoint him...which is awesome, because I really wanted it to be significant.  I'm really happy you liked this chapter :) 

Title: Chapter 12 08 Dec 2007 6:39 pm
Reviewer: curlybean (Signed) [Report This]
    I think your Snape is absolutely perfect. Definitely Snapey enough. I almost cried when he said "Do not disappoint me, Potter." I think Harry wants to make Snape, more than anyone else, proud of him. Hopefully Snape realizes this and remembers it when the boy messes up, because we all know that's inevitable.

    Thanks so much for the wonderful chapter. It made my day. Especially when I read that you will update again before the holidays. Yay!!! Take care....

    Author's Response:

    I'm really happy to hear that you liked that line.  I wanted it to make an impact on Harry in a non-fluffy way, and I think it worked.  If Harry messes up in future chapters, it will most likely be for the sake of someone else.  He doesn't really get into trouble for his own gain, which is why he had a hard time dealing with what he'd done in the first chapter--at least in my eyes, I guess.  lol. 

    Thanks very much for such a kind and encouraging review :) 

Title: Chapter 12 08 Dec 2007 5:46 pm
Reviewer: mamaduck (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Another great chapter, Jade.
    I love how you convey the body language. It was so vivid when Harry was contorting to scratch his forehead with his upper arm.
    Snape's interrogation seemed spot on. Never let your victim know exactly what it is you are trying to find out - although, as grown-ups, we readers know what Snape's getting at.
    Loved the part with the Defense book at the end. Of course Harry would exclaim over the pictures and diagrams; he's twelve. They would be very exciting to him. Snape is very familar with the minds of twelve year old boys, and so his subsequent warning was appropriate and properly dire. If I know Harry, and 12 year old boys in general, he'll have a hard time remembering his vow to Snape when he reads some of the glorious techniques likely found in that little book. Self-restraint is not Harry's strength. I guess we'll find out!
    Thanks for your update. Please, please post more soon. I, for one, could use some pre-holiday stress release. Quinn

    Author's Response:

    Hi Quinn!  Thank you so much for taking the time out to review :)  December is insane. 

    And you don't even know how happy it makes me when you point out the small specifics that stand out to you--like Harry trying to scratch his forehead.  I really try hard to characterize Harry in a way that people can relate to. 

    When I was writing this chapter, I thought...huh...Harry really hasn't had a decent DADA teacher, so he wouldn't know much about it.  Hermione cast most of the spells, etc. in the first book. 

    And yes, Harry does lack self-restraint, but if he DOES happen to mess up, it probably won't be on purpose.  He tends to get himself in trouble for other people. 

    Thanks again for the lovely review!  I'll post as soon as I can.


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