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Reviews For Emerald Eyes
keep up the great work- i really really love this story!! Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really glad you're liking this story :)
Snape's slip into using Harry's given name was very credible. I think he would question himself about something like that. I noticed he didn't say it again in this chapter. However you decide to include the Snape-Malfoy interaction will be great. I am expecting a subtle, succinct, reference that implies much. Hopefully, in their ensuing conversation, Harry will learn that Snape did, indeed, punish Malfoy. I think Harry needs to learn that although a spanking is horrible at the time, and meant to be, he will survive and in all likelihood feel the "sting of Snape's palm" again. He is young, and will not grow up or change overnight. The revelation about Ron and the howler was a step in that direction. Perhaps Ron can help with this aspect as well as he's likely been smacked by one parent or the other. Looking forward to another update, from either story! Thank you for this chapter. Quinn Author's Response: Quinn, Thanks for the banner compliment! SiriuslyMental made it for me. She's very talented in that area :) This story is so much more challenging to write than Starting from Scratch, but it's always good to be challenged once in a while...lol. Anyhow, I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. I think it would be quite out of character for Snape to use Harry's given name all of the time. I love how you pointed it out, though, because it was meant to be a sort of moment-of-panic slip-up for Snape. I feel that when I asked the question about the Malfoy scene, many people figured that I was going to incorporate him into the story or create a Malfoy/Snape bonding chapter, but really, I wasn't. I think I've decided how I'm going to handle the situation. I've taken a subtle route with this story, and I'll most likely continue it when it comes to dealing with Draco. ;) I don't think many realize that spanking is still used by parents as a deterrent in many households. I'm not against it, so I suppose it doesn't seem as unnatural to me to incorporate it into my story. And you're right: it's meant to be something Harry doesn't want to have happen again. He's twelve, and he makes mistakes, and children often need constant reminding--lecturing and grounding doesn't always work. But whether Harry realizes it or not, he needs comfort and reassurance after his punishment. Hopefully Snape will provide it in his own Snape-like way. It's odd writing such an emotionally-heavy chapter with Sirius and Harry and then turning around and trying to do the same thing, yet in a different way, with Harry and Snape. lol. It really wasn't intentional of me to run into two discipline scenes back-to-back with my stories. I now need to put on my 'Sirius hat' to go into SfS mode. *Bah-Dum-Chhing* Get it? Sorry for the bad joke. lol. Anyway, you know how much I appreciate your amazingness, but let me say it again: thank you, thank you thaaaank you! ~Jade
and i wouldn't mind if u did put in a Snape and Malfoy scene,.. just a small one, so we could know wat happens ;) anyways, great story! can't wait for the next chapter! Author's Response: Well, thank you! I think I've got a handle on how I'm going to deal with Draco. Glad you're enjoying this story :) I'll try to update soon!
Author's Response: Yes, I wanted to show his embarassment and anger over the whole situation--feeling that he was being treated unfairly. But you're right: we know what's really going on, and so does Snape. Harry's punishment was more about cultivating him for later challenges in life, as well as teaching him to control his rash behavior. Harry is quite cute, isn't he? lol. Thanks for the review!
Secondly, I laughed out loud at Snape's reluctance to say Dumbledore's password out loud. Then the gargoyle made him say it even though it knew that Dumbledore was gone. Very funny. Draco is such a little bully and, yes, I would love to see a brief (or not so brief) moment of Severus dealing with him. That ruler sounds ominous. The whole thing between Draco and Harry had me talking to my computer, begging Harry not to give in to Malfoy's taunts. But, we all know how that turned out. Harry didn't do too good of a job explaining himself to Snape, but I have a feeling he would have been punished either way. Snape seems to hold Harry to a higher standard than Malfoy, which I'm sure Harry sees as completely unfair, but makes complete sense to Snape. I guess he expects better from Harry. Isn't that sweet? The picture you created through your words of Snape and Harry after the punishment was wonderful. Snape would never admit it, but his icy exterior is slowly melting to reveal a much more pleasant, warm-hearted Snape. Bit by bit he's growing to care for Harry. And Harry, in the meantime, is getting just what he needs rom Snape, someone to hold him accountable for his actions. What child, or adult for that matter, doesn't need that?!? Anyway, loved the chapter. Now I can go back to waiting somewhat impatiently for an update on your other story. Take care and keep writing..... Author's Response: Thank you! SiriuslyMental made it for me. She's amazing. Dumbledore's passwords are ridiculous. lol. Although I think Dumbledore trusts Snape, there are moments where Severus feels that is not the case--like in DH when he wouldn't tell Snape about the horocruxes. I wanted to portray that in the beginning of this chapter as well. However, I feel a lot of stories really bash Dumbledore, and although it's satisfying to read at times, this story won't really be one of those. I think I know how I'm going to handle Draco in the next chapter. I wasn't going to make it a Severus/Draco bonding scene, and I think that's what some readers are thinking is going to happen. But it won't. It won't! lol I wanted the spanking to be more about teaching Harry to control his emotions before he goes out of control. But Harry was adamant in telling Snape that it wasn't his fault--that he didn't start the fight. However, to Snape, that would be a trivial thing. He knows that he's going to lay into Malfoy for being such a horrible little slimeball. For Harry, however, Snape wants him to be the bigger person--he has to learn to step down from situations that don't require him to use his defense skills--the little that he has aquired. I'm really glad you liked this chapter. I AM going to work on SfS next. I love alternating between stories, because while this one is more challenging, Starting From Scratch is very relaxing to write. I don't know why. lol. Thanks so much for the fab review :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I think I know what I'm going to do about Snape and Malfoy. ;)
I liked how Snape questioned his use of Harry's first name. I hate it in fics where he suddenly starts using it and no one acknowledges it or thinks it's anything out of the ordinary. I think if Snape had used Harry's first name in canon, they would both notice it. You pay attention to the canon versions of the characters very well. At first I was so proud of Harry for controlling himself and deciding that cursing or fighting Malfoy would be a bad idea and that he should back off. I thought he had finally learned some sense and then...*sigh* I suppose he didn't mean to cause that, but he still wanted to hurt Malfoy. I think he got the punishment he deserved and I can see Snape's reasoning. After I first read the chapter, I really wanted a Malfoy and Snape scene, but then I thought about it and changed my mind. So many fics are about the relationships between Malfoy, Snape, and Harry, and what I really like about this one is that the main focus is on just Harry and Snape. While I do like some of the stories that include more of Malfoy, I think yours is better the way it is. But it's your decision and I think you should trust your instincts and do what you think it best. =) This is a great story and I'm really enjoying it so far. Your characterization is what really shines. Can't wait for more! Author's Response: Thanks for the great review! My original instincts were telling me not to include the scene. Perhaps I should just follow them. lol. I did want to hear readers' opinion on the matter, however. I appreciate all of the great feedback I've been getting :) The whole 'Calling Harry by his name' thing is something that I didn't want to happen until about this point--I didn't want it to be a deliberate thing. I know what you mean about the immediate use of 'Harry'. He's never called him that, and therefore it would be weird for Snape to address him as such frequently. I think there are so many times in the books where Harry tried so hard to do what's right, but still ends up allowing his emotions to control his actions (which, who can blame him?). But of course, Snape would see that as having a death wish, especially since he knows that Harry has the power to kill Voldemort. Acting irrationally would not be a good thing. And that is why the spanking was more about teaching Harry to control his anger. He didn't offer immediate comfort either. Perhaps he's starting to realize that Harry is just a boy afterall...
Seeruk Author's Response: Thanks for reading and sharing your opinion on the matter! :) I'm glad you're enjoying the story!
Malfoy's such a brat. He goes around looking to create trouble - at least Harry only stumbles upon and doesn't try to stir it up like that sneaky little blond boy. Can't wait for more. Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for leaving me some feedback :) I've actually never seen Die Hard. Maybe I should? I did mean for this chapter to have a bit of the 'sweet' factor, but hopefully it wasn't too mushy. I get a bit worried about that. lol. There will be a discussion in the next chapter for little distraught Harry. I shake my fist at Malfoy. I used to like his character, but the more I write Snape/Harry fanfiction, the more difficult it is to find a soft place in my heart for Draco. Unfortunately. But you're right about the differences in seeking out trouble. I'm so glad to hear you're still enjoying the story! By the way, I'm dying for a new chapter of 'House'. Can't wait to see how Harry reacts to being stuck in knee-pants... lol |
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