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Reviews For Emerald Eyes
Author's Response: Cute in a...strained, awkward sort of way? Awesome. I agree. LOL. Thanks for reading!!
Author's Response: Thank you!! I love that you're loving it. lol :) It's always fun to find fics that are completed or have a lot of chapters because you don't have to wait for the updates. I'm so glad you found mine and are enjoying it as well. Thanks for reading and leaving me feedback!
Author's Response: The next chapter will begin with a discussion between Harry and Severus that will hopefully iron out a lot of the tension revolving around their mentor-ish relationship. And yes, you're right. Harry doesn't fully understand Severus' intention, but subconsciously, he knows that he's being cared for. I'm glad you're liking the story. Thanks for letting me know!
Author's Response: I'm actually really happy that you considered Harry's small act of passing on the notes 'mature'. Yes, he acts like a boy in this fic who often doesn't have a clue, but it's not as if he isn't making an effort. ;) Thanks so much for the review! It's good to see you're still reading and enjoying :)
I really liked this chapter. I say that for each one I think but it's the truth. The scene with Hermione trying to help Harry out with the letters when there wasn't a lot of time made me snicker. Leave it to Hermione to find a way to bring books into everything. I am curious why Draco was annoyed as he was leaving. Did I miss something? By far the Snape/Harry interactions are my favorites. They each don't quite know how to act around one another. I was holding my breath through the scene on the steps. Bravo, to Harry for his Grif bravery. When he flung himself at Snape and the disfunctioning part hindered Snape's reaction at first. Bravo too for Snape for letting the kid in. I'm going to go reread and melt all over again. Thank you!! Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the great review! Writing the Harry/Severus interaction is my absolute fave, so I'm really glad you enjoy those bits of the story :) You've pretty much nailed it: they don't know how to act around each other. Harry is still his defiant, hasty self, and Snape is snarky and aloof. However, they've changed in subtle, gradual ways that neither of them realize. Oh, and the Draco issue will be covered next chapter. Chapter 28 will begin with a much-needed discussion between Harry and Snape and the question will be answered. I should have mentioned that in a note at the end, but I just wanted to get this chapter posted as it had been a while ;) Thanks for asking about that. And thank you for your compliment about my characterization of Snape. I, too, see him as a stern professor, but with Harry, he's a bit at a loss with how to deal with him, because it's not like he's ever grown close to a student (besides Draco). This next chapter will iron things out. I've been waiting forever to write it. lol. I love that you're still enjoying this story, and I really appreciate you taking the time to let me know!
Author's Response: Thanks, Beth!! Yes, this chapter was definitely on angst-overload at the end, but it was one of those moments that was also rather cathartic for me to write, as I have felt that the tension has been coiling for quite some time. You'll see a bit of a change in attitude after this chapter from Harry and Snape. Harry will truly have to prove that he can handle the situation without being dangerously impetuous... I am so glad you're still enjoying this story so much :) Thanks for all of your reviews and encouragement.
Author's Response: Thanks!! You're exactly right about the relationship between Harry and Severus growing in a more parental sort of way. That's mainly why Harry feels comfortable enough to be cheeky with Severus more than he should. However, the next (final) few chapters will test Harry's ability to truly listen and follow instructions. It will prove whether or not he's actually learned anything from Snape after all. ;) Thanks again for the great review! By the way, I've reviewed, but I just wanted to reiterate that your new story is fantastic. I can't wait to see what you do with it!
Besides, Harry doesn't listen. He panics, swears, follows his own ideas, runs around like mad - and Snape seems very patient, talking to him, letting him get the feelings out, even putting him to bed for the day when Harry got hysterical. Kudos to Snape for bearing it that long - I expected him to have Harry over his knee at the first sign of angst, telling Harry he was done with the histrionics and Harry can either get a hold of himself or start everyday with a spanking. I think Harry would come around pretty quickly with those options. But I'm enjoying reading this story and I can't wait to see where you take these characters. I'm enjoying the ride the whole way! Author's Response: Hey, Perry :) Thanks so much for letting me know that you're still reading my story. Yes, Harry is still Harry. In a way, he's improved, though. He and Hermione could have easily taken the last ten minutes before she left to search for the Chamber or could have been doing that all along, actually. Instead, he's gone to Snape. And true, Snape's been pretty patient with Harry, allowing him to speak his mind before throwing him over his lap for a spanking... But in this case, it's what Harry needs...more than punishment, I think. I've read a few stories where Snape is spanking Harry every five minutes, and it just doesn't seem to work. If a spanking is supposed to be that effective, Snape wouldn't have to keep punishing Harry for his rudeness/impulsiveness, etc. As for a stricter Snape, he'll begin to emerge with the last few chapters. He is allowing Harry one day to search with him, and that day will be orderly and productive or else. I think maybe I've just been around teenagers long enough to realize that they bounce back way too easily from chastisement... They'll be subdued for maybe an hour after a scolding, but then the next day, they're ready for another round of 'let's annoy the adults in any way we can'. I wanted to give Harry his customary defiant edge but also show a gradual change. It's annoying at times, yes. But so are twelve year olds. I have a twelve-year-old cousin who can be the most annoying thing on the planet, and her parents are quite strict. *shrugs* Anyway, I guess what I'm trying to say is that this story has been a bit of an exploration for me in adolescent angst, attitude, etc. I try to make it as realistic as possible and stay true to the characters. But fear not: your strict Snape is just around the corner ;) I love that you're still reading this, by the way. Thanks for sticking with the story :)
A heartbeat that seemed to mimic Harry’s own at the moment." I just love this imagery. It's so very vivid. I really can see the parchment fluttering. I love the part at the end of the Hermione bit, with Harry realizing that maybe, just maybe Snape might actually care about him. Egads! LOL He's so clueless, it's adorable. I really liked your description of Harry and Snape out in the snow, with he snow, 'seeping into Harry's scalp' and making him shiver. It makes me shiver as well. And the scene between the two them at the end was so intense. It was riveting. Just back and forth and back and forth and Harry's worry just spiraling out of control and Snape's, "What has gotten into young man?" Well, I loved that. It's like Snape is completely at a loss to figure out what is up with Mr. Potter and I love that. He's not composed all the time. I love a bit of a fumbling Snape. This was a bit of genius: "as if the defiance would topple out of his trousers and onto the floor like stolen paraphernalia." I really liked that one. :oD And I loved that Harry just sort of collapsed on him. And I loved that Snape scolded him for it, citing that he was too young to act that way and Harry agreeing and being all embarrassed by his behavior. I've told you before, but the way you write Harry is just spot on. He's a child and I adore it. I can relate to him somehow. And I was very excited to see that Snape allowed Harry to stay against him for a moment. Just a hint of soft in the gruff sea that is your Snape. And he is gonna let him help! And Harry was so worried about him. Awww... It's like completely fluffy but almost not fluffy at all. How do you DO that? Well, genius. Just genius, Jade. I can't wait for the next intense installment. I don't know how you'll get more intense than this, but somehow I think you'll manage. Oh and I loved this line as well, "the hooked nose dipped and broadened as the potions master glanced down at the ruddy-cheeked boy." I can just see it! Great Chapter, Jade! Author's Response: You are the queen of proof-reading. Have I told you that? Thanks (again and again and again) for looking this over for me. It means a lot. Really. I love that you chose your favorite lines and shared them with me :) This was one of those chapters where Snape could have easily lost it and punished Harry right away. And I think that might have happened if Harry hadn't broken down at the end. Just the mention of a spanking calmed him right down, despite his defiance. It was more about Harry caring for Snape too much to allow him to just transport himself with Ginny's portkey. And as this chapter was from Harry's perspective, we have to simply deduce that Snape understood that ;) I'm really glad that you didn't find the end of this too fluffy or over-the-top, as I think it could easily have turned into that. I really try to balance Snape's original 'gruff' demeanor (as you put it) with his slow-growing affection for Harry. And I'm really pleased that you enjoyed the tense moments and considered them well-balanced :) I haven't read your glorious final chapter yet because I spent the morning at Starbucks and then getting my W-2 reprinted *blushes with stupidity* LOL. I'm going to hang up my laundry, and then I'm settling down to savor every word. I can't wait.
Great chapter and I can't wait for the next one. Author's Response: Thanks so much for the lovely review, Tiffany :) Detail is something that I really try to work on without being overdramatic, so I really aprpeciate you pointing that out to me. I'll try to write the next one quickly, but I feel like my moments of inspiration are coming a bit slower than they used to, unfortunately... By the way, how's BaF coming? |
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