would it be too much to ask you to abandon real life and continue this story? lol
Brilliant! I love your Dr. bed side manner! More soon?? PLEASE!
Loving it so...hopefully there will be more interaction with Snape and Harry.
ooh i feel like i've been waiting ages for this! i love this story and your characters are brilliant! i cannot wait for the next chapter, please please make it soon, your reviewers will love you forever... xx
This is the first I've read your story.
I like your Dr. Yuri and Taki. They are both interesting and fun characters.
I think your plot is interesting. I do find your Snape not quite in character. I can believe that he would be good at caring for his Slytherins in similar states of mind, but you have not really given me a reason for him to be concerned about Harry except as the defeater of Voldemort (according to the prophecy.) He himself has contributed a good deal to Harry's problem with his many years of torment of Harry -- I would have expected him to realize this. He's not stupid even in canon.
But other than that the story is a good one.
| Title: Chapter 5
| 08 Apr 2008 12:53 am
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| Reviewer: AllyKat (Anonymous)
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I don't know, sometimes the plot seems jumpy. Some stories don't have enough dialogue, but I think sometimes you have too much. Maybe more explanation of what's going on?
Your Dr. Taki is an interesting creation. You did a good job showing us a muggle Severus--gruff, tough, but with a soft underside. I'll be interested to find out how he knows of magic. The chapter still needs some betaing.
| Title: Chapter 5
| 07 Apr 2008 7:48 pm
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| Reviewer: Caro (Anonymous)
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Oh I so totally loooove this fic!!!! Pretty please with a cherry on top can you update soon????
interesting idea to have harry get sick, a good way to force him to depend on taki & snape for care and also to learn they will care for him when he needs it. snape still has a ways to go before he can admit to himself that he cares let alone start acting consistently caring, perhaps this plot device will help him with that too - he certainly seems gentler in this chapter. i like dr. yuri, but found his accent to be a little over-stereotyped. russians don't talk like yoda!
yay, sick harry! i love angst!
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