A great start.
I know this isn’t finished but I’m going to read it anyway.
| Title: Chapter 1: Let the games begin.
| 19 Jun 2023 12:31 am
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| Reviewer: cavehack (Signed)
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I really liked the domesticity of it all, with Harry as an unruly little boy - very fun!
Oh, I wonder what that's all about! This is a great start!
i dont like Lily.... she seems mean..... i guess this story is abandoned
| Title: Chapter 1: Let the games begin.
| 20 Jan 2008 9:16 pm
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| Reviewer: ER (Anonymous)
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I was just wondering if you were going to update anytime soon. This is such a good fic and I'd hate for it to become abandoned.
| Title: Chapter 1: Let the games begin.
| 25 Oct 2007 9:31 pm
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| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
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How cute was this? I liked the chapter though it was short. I like that Harry is rambucious and boyish, and Snape is the irritated, annoyed stepfather who yells a lot and ruins Lily's peace. And I love that Lily won't get involved and choses to hide when trouble arises.
I'm off to read the next chapter
Author's Response: I love your stories so much! LOL I just wanted to say that first off. The ironic thing is that I'd just used the word 'rambucious' to describe Harry in chapter three!!! Hope you enjoyed chapter two, and I'll just say about how much I admire your writing! :-)
| Title: Chapter 1: Let the games begin.
| 24 Oct 2007 9:32 pm
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| Reviewer: JEN77 (Anonymous)
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GOOD START. jUST DON'T LET SEVERUS BE A TYRANT. CORPORAL PUNISHMENT SHOULD BE COUPLED WITH LOVE ONLY.
Author's Response: Ooh you're shouting at me. LOL. I've not used any corporal punishment yet, so you'll just have to wait and see ;-P
| Title: Chapter 1: Let the games begin.
| 24 Oct 2007 2:31 pm
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| Reviewer: Phoenix1 (Signed)
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I looked at some of the reviews before posting my own because I didn't want to be to hard on this, but I have to say that I just can't think of Lily as the type of mother to sit in the tub when her son was about to get into trouble. In fact I can only imagine she'd be just the opposite. So I agree with everyone else and hope that Snape lightens up a little with Harry.
Author's Response: I take your point, but I know from experience that some people change after losing their loved ones. I think perhaps that may become more apparent in the next few chapters. Thank you for your review though, it's nice to get feedback.
| Title: Chapter 1: Let the games begin.
| 24 Oct 2007 2:30 pm
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| Reviewer: ER (Anonymous)
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Very interesting premise. It almost seems as if Lily doesn't really care for Harry. I'm sure she does, but she seems kind of indifferent to him, which is different than how Lily is usually portrayed. I like it. Please keep writing. I have a feeling this will be a very good story.
Author's Response: Yes she does seem that way, doesn't she? I think I may have gone a little too far- but I was trying to humanize her character, as I often find her portrayed almost Saint like! I'm going to clear a few things up with my next chapter! Thank you for you review, hopefully the next installment won't disappoint!
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