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Reviews For The Gambler's Son
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I initially wrote the thing about Lily drinking wine in the first chapter before I'd planned for her to have a baby (I know I should plan things before I start- but I'm more of a spontaneous writer, which has its faults!!!) so then I decided to make it just the one glass, and she won't be doing it again! They'll be more updates vvv soon. I'm at work tomorrow, but hopefully I'll be able to get another chapter out. So please carry on reading and letting me know your thoughts! :-)
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm so glad that you like it, I was worried that people might hate what I write, but so far most people are being lovely and the criticism I do get is very constructive. I'll update very soon, so keep a look out for chapter 3! :-)
I'm off to read the next chapter Author's Response: I love your stories so much! LOL I just wanted to say that first off. The ironic thing is that I'd just used the word 'rambucious' to describe Harry in chapter three!!! Hope you enjoyed chapter two, and I'll just say about how much I admire your writing! :-)
I could easily picture Snape in this sort of position and trying to be both disciplinarian as well as caring for Harry at the same time. And the way you wrote the first chapter, and how Lily lived while James died for Harry was so believable! Many times this sort of storyline comes across as far too contrived, but I thought your version worked quite well. Author's Response: I know what you mean about contrived. Sometimes you read a story where everything is just a little bit too picture perfect, and that wasn't how I always imagined things to be, though it's just a personal opinion. Thank you so much for sharing your comments with me, I hope that you like my next chapter as much!
We rarely see a good Harry who wasn't abused, and I'm glad that you've done such a good job so far keeping him in character. I can't wait to read more! Author's Response: Hehe, I'm glad I surprised you! I hope I don't disapoint with the next chapter! Thanks for your review!
Author's Response: thank you for saying that it is realistic- emotionally- that is the angle I am going for with this fic. I'm glad you enjoy reading it, and i'm already half way through writing the next chapter :-)
The idea of Snape doing breathing exercises to calm himself down is hilarious. The fact that he finds it hard to even get past the number three is even more hilarious. He can be infinitely patient, usually when dealing with his potions, but I'm sure when he is dealing with troublesome children that patience goes right out the window. Severus' threat to give Harry something to cry about was great. And I love Harry calling him "Daddy". I wonder what Snape feels when he hears that? I'm sure it has to tug at his heart at least a little bit. My favorite part of the chapter has to be Snape quickly trying to change the subject with Lily to keep her from finding out how he handled that Seamus/Harry situation. And Harry's defense of Snape was too cute. "Only family can say mean things, right Daddy?" Too cute. So, I'm pretty sure that the thought of spending two weeks in his room and going to bed by 7pm was too much for Harry. Did he choose to let Snape immediately deal with his transgressions? I'm not sure if I would have been that brave? Sorry for the long review, but I truly loved the chapter. Thanks for sharing. Take care.... Author's Response: I love your review! It's so nice to know which bits work well, as sometimes I write something and then after posting think "Oh no! maybe that wasn't right at all!". The idea of Snape doing breathing exercises made me laugh outloud when it came into my head- I was at my university's cafe and a group of students looked at me like I was going mad! Hopefully you'll like the next chapter, and once again thank you for such a nice review, it made my day! :-)
I'm sorry though, I'm beginning to quite dislike your Lily, she sounds as though she's completely self-obsessed and living in the past!! To paraphrase one of my favourite sayings: "Get down off the cross, we need the wood!!" Severus and Harry had some really nice interaction in this chapter, and I hope we get to see them in situations when they're not at loggerheads with one another!! Looking forward to more!! Scarlett Author's Response: I love that saying! I'd not heard it, but i'm going to keep it for future use. I love cute Harry, i'm writing some more of him at the moment! Harry and Severus will have a bit more bonding soon (though I bet Snape would hate the word 'bonding' LOL). Thanks for your lovely review! I'll have another chapter out very soon :-)
Author's Response: Ooh you're shouting at me. LOL. I've not used any corporal punishment yet, so you'll just have to wait and see ;-P
Author's Response: I take your point, but I know from experience that some people change after losing their loved ones. I think perhaps that may become more apparent in the next few chapters. Thank you for your review though, it's nice to get feedback. |
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