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Reviews For The House Which Time Forgot
I am just blown away! If this were a book, you couldn't pry it out of my hands with a crowbar! As much as I do enjoy a reluctantly fluffy Snape, this characterization works for me. Snape is a man who has known little but bitterness, disappointment and abuse his whole life. While we may know from the last book that deep down, Snape has a noble spirit, but you sure as hell wouldn't know it to meet him! He is NOT a happy man and he is NOT a nice man. He has had a really miserable life and is more than a little angry about it. I can see him viewing Harry as being symbolic of a life time's worth of bitter disappointment, anger and grief. I can completely buy that Snape would be a right viscious bastard and would not want to be in Harry's place right now. Loved it hon! Tracy
Harry, on the other hand, I find very out of character. He sounds more like he's 8, not almost 12. After everything he went through, all the pain from keeping the PS from Voldemort, I don't see a horrific spanking, or even many, having him begging Snape for mercy. 8/10--For Harry being out of character.
Also, I find your characterization to be off--very off. Your version of Snape in particular is not very well thought-out. Have you even read the books? In them, Snape is petty and mean, but never abusive. He enjoyed seeing his students squirm with discomfort, but had their best interests at heart. Also, your version of Harry is a dim-witted, whinny wuss. If bad characterization wasn't enough, I find your dialogue to be cheap and cheesy. I gave your story a rating of two--only because your grammar and spelling wasn't too bad, despite a few errors. Author's Response: I'm sorry my version of the characters didn't sit well with you. I tried to make these characters as true to the books as I could where my Time and Place stories diverged from that quite a bit. After reading the 7th book, I wanted to show the man who would become headmaster and allow students to be tortured daily under his control. The same man who taunted students in his own class and sneered over Harry's painful childhood memories in Occlumency lessons. And who in the movies whacks his students on the back of the head with a hardback textbook. As for Harry, I will try to work on his voice as I develop this story. If you want a lighter story, may I recomend Tracy's "The Ideal Guardian" or Dina's "The Painful Guardianship"?
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