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Title: Chapter 2 - Morning Talks 14 Nov 2007 7:17 am
Reviewer: SiriuslyMental (Signed) [Report This]
    This is so amazing, I can't even tell you. I love that you don't hesitate to make Snape the nasty git he can be. I love him and everything, but the way you write him is so much more realistic than most people - it's so refreshing not to have a Snape bending over backwards to help poor, unloved little Harry. And Harry is not pathetic! He fights back! I love this. I'd always thought of Snape as a poor man and was so frustrated when everyone placed him in mansions - your description of his house is actually the closest I've ever heard in fanfiction to what I've always imagined it as. The two rooms upstairs and two down, the tinyness, the depressing oldness - and the dog is a wonderful touch. I'm so excited to read the next chapter. Please update soon.
Title: Chapter 2 - Morning Talks 14 Nov 2007 7:13 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Run, Harry, run!!!

    Great chapter! Good thing Snape cut Harry off when he was trying to explain what he was doing standing on the bed. I don't think that trying to jump to the window to run away from him would have been the best thing to admit to Snape!

    For some reason I really loved this line: "Snape belonged at Hogwarts down in the dungeons, not living in old houses with a really mean dog." Haha!

    Typo: "The stairs creaked noisily as Harry when downstairs" went

    I loved this line: "He expected it to taste like one of Snape's potions - disgusting and vomit-inducing. " Hahaha! Great descriptions in this chapter!

    I liked how Snape took care of Harry, giving him an extra portion of breakfast even though he did it grudgingly. I wonder if Snape was reading Harry's mind about the porridge, or if Harry's body language was just too obvious.

    Missing words: "Harry felt as if he were missing something, some part of the argument that changed the atmosphere, but he didn't know what. "I - what are you going to me?"" going to do to me?

    "But I hope your stupid master falls over dead and no feeds you." no one feeds

    Typo: He found an empty bucket in the corner and he took a tentatively step towards the outside door.

    Great job- wow Snape is really a cruel beast! But i guess he's going to get Hedwig, right? Right? Hopefully. Poor owl! but if Harry has Hedwig, he'll owl for help, right?

    I can't wait until he tries to escape but I guess there's more to happen before then.

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