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Reviews For The House Which Time Forgot
Your stories are always so fresh and unpredictable that I can't wait to see where this is going. I'd try to guess, but I just know I'd be wrong! LOL! Fantastic hon! Tracyboo
I`ve yet to come across a crueler, more irrational, more brutish Snape. IMO, Snape is out of character. Moreover, here he is a flat, caricature of the abusive, unreasonable, mean daddy sterotype. Harry, in turn, seems very young and very feminized. That said, I don`t think you should be faulted for these deviant characterizations. It should not be a rule that a fanfic author has to stick to the canon characterizations or even present a plot that is anyway likely. Here you depict the Snape/Harry relationship exaggeratedl,y but nevertheless in its essence. Snape is scary and and Harry resents and fears him--that`s the basic dynamic of their relationship in the canon as it is here. I like how you`ve set it in a Pseudo-Victorian domestic space. The setting works as the era brings connotations of repression, rigid disciplinarians, and skewed family values. So, very astute move there :) The dialouge is bad because Snape and Harry do not sound British. You interjected `bloody` in there a few times, but it really didn`t have the desired effect. The utter ridiculousness of The House Which Time Forgot is what is great about it. I was thinking while reading the whole first chapter that Harry was just having a nightmare in which he associates Snape with the Dursleys (seeing as how Snape cuts his hair and tries to clothe Harry in a shrinking sweater) which would have been really great. Actually, it would have been brilliant. There is a cool, plastic sense of reality here that fits with a dreamlike state. In short this story is not plausible with regards to character or situation--but that is not the reason to not like it. Author's Response: since I'm not really sure if you like this story or not, I have no response really. Glad you had some thoughts about it (apathy is really the worst feeling to have towards anything), and if you kind of liked, it hope you keep reading. If not, don't.
Hope to see more soon, Keira
"He tricked her, took her away," Snape looked demented. "I loved her, and she went with him. She saw what he was, and she still went with him! And you're going to pay for it, pay for all of it." Wow, he's crazy! Unhinged. I hope that Dumbledore is the one at the door. "How long would they be pretending? And it wasn't very good pretending, considering that Snape kept going back to being his old ugly self instead of staying the stern schoolmaster." LOL! I love how Harry is such a child in this. He knows what good pretending is, and he's thinking of how Snape is failing. Goodness. "Harry had read books and seen Muggle movies about the 1800's; schoolmasters back then didn't go mad and blame their students for crazy things." LOL!! Of course they didn't! I love Harry's childish narration. Fantastic job. I hope that you will be able to update soon! Author's Response: Thanks, Jan. This was a hard chapter to write, but I enjoyed doing it.
Can't wait to see what happens next!
I'm really curious to know where you're going with this. I know you have probably have a great plot planned and I can't wait to see where it goes. I also love how different this story is. It's a very intriguing story. Great work! |
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