What can I say other than, I can't wait to read the next chap and owe, what a sad and cute end of the chap.
It's terific to see them slowly getting along with each other, I like very much. And I like the fact that in some situations it's simply trying it out for both of them. Snape clueless is adorable.. I'm starting to ramble, sorry.
Have a nice and sunny week, your Melfis.
I think what you meant to have Severus throw the literally bloody potato in was the WASTE (as in garbage) bin, rather than the "waist" (as in mid-torso area) bin.
I love the idea of the 'games'. Snape is acting REALLY weird of course, and is wonderfully evil! I'm really looking forward to how this will turn out. It's very exciting! I also love Vampyr. Please can you make sure there is lots of him in it!
Oh, I hope he tells Harry about Lily soon! What a bonding moment that would be :)
Great job with this chapter. I love how you interject little inner thoughts and your use of imagery. The metallic blood dancing on his tongue was definitely my favorite sentence :)
| Title: Chapter 9 - His Mother
| 03 Jun 2008 6:56 am
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| Reviewer: batfan7 (Anonymous)
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I think this story has grown on me. I wasn't to sure about it at first because Snape was acting so insane, but I think it's almost a reasonable insanity... I mean he seems to have been trying to find some way of relating to the boy. At first he was fairly harsh, but it's cooled down enough that I'm not wanting to kill the man for becomeing abusive. And it's been a gradual and subtle enough change to be realistic for the character you've created. I think this 'pretending to be family' thing will be getting better and better, even if Snape never turns into a warm, fuzzy kind of person :-)
I look forward to your next chapter!
One of the things I love so much about this story is that I'm kept in suspense with Harry. I have no idea what's going on in Snape's head, but I'm glad I don't. It makes it more fun that way.
I thought that the punishment scene was done perfectly. You brought up a good point about the purpose of a spanking--it's not to injure or release frustration...but to make the kid realize that they've done something stupid. I like how Harry contrasted his first spanking to the one he just received from his 'father'. Completely different. It makes me wonder, though, if Snape is even coherent at this point. Again, I love having to infer and predict.
Harry is such a boy in this story...and he *actually* seems like an eleven year old. He still plays with toys when he's by himself and he's continuing to play along with Snape's 'game'. I don't like stories that make Harry too powerful or brave at that age. He's young and previously neglected, and it's more likely that he would cling to whatever sort of guidance/comfort/etc. he's given by an adult. Plus, he's pretty much adorable, so I love him for that too. ;)
This story is amazing...it sucks me in every time.
Snape is really crazy ... and he is starting to affect Harry! Ahh! Well, really good story and update soon!
| Title: Chapter 9 - His Mother
| 24 May 2008 11:30 pm
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| Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous)
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Interesting changes going on. Is Dumbledore ever going to notice that Harry is no longer at the Dursley's?
Brilliant. Can't wait to read more.
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