| Title: Chapter 2 - Morning Talks
| 15 Nov 2007 5:46 am
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| Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous)
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So far, so good. It's just that Snape, while often portrayed as nasty, seems to be going overboard with no reason. Yes, he did give Potter a warm nightshirt, but he spanked him, too. Yes, he has food, but does Snape have to act even worse than the Dursley's? I hope there is a reason for such excessiveness.
| Title: Chapter 2 - Morning Talks
| 15 Nov 2007 5:17 am
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| Reviewer: Carolyn (Anonymous)
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I am really enjoying this story. I think a truly nasty Snape is a fun change. Of course I still love your more gentle Snape in A Time and a Place to Learn, so I hope you continue to update that as well!
| Title: Chapter 1 - Vampyr and a Bat
| 15 Nov 2007 4:40 am
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| Reviewer: Snarky B. (Anonymous)
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I don't like your story. Sorry.
| Title: Chapter 1 - Vampyr and a Bat
| 15 Nov 2007 4:39 am
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| Reviewer: umitilla (Anonymous)
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Are you sure you posted this at the right archive? This archive is for stories that feature a mentoring relationship between Harry and Snape. I'm pretty sure torture is against the archive rules. I suggest an archive such as FF.net.
Also, I find your characterization to be off--very off. Your version of Snape in particular is not very well thought-out. Have you even read the books? In them, Snape is petty and mean, but never abusive. He enjoyed seeing his students squirm with discomfort, but had their best interests at heart. Also, your version of Harry is a dim-witted, whinny wuss.
If bad characterization wasn't enough, I find your dialogue to be cheap and cheesy. I gave your story a rating of two--only because your grammar and spelling wasn't too bad, despite a few errors.
Author's Response: I'm sorry my version of the characters didn't sit well with you. I tried to make these characters as true to the books as I could where my Time and Place stories diverged from that quite a bit. After reading the 7th book, I wanted to show the man who would become headmaster and allow students to be tortured daily under his control. The same man who taunted students in his own class and sneered over Harry's painful childhood memories in Occlumency lessons. And who in the movies whacks his students on the back of the head with a hardback textbook. As for Harry, I will try to work on his voice as I develop this story. If you want a lighter story, may I recomend Tracy's "The Ideal Guardian" or Dina's "The Painful Guardianship"?
| Title: Chapter 2 - Morning Talks
| 15 Nov 2007 4:38 am
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| Reviewer: LovelyLena (Anonymous)
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Hmm...I'm not sure about this story, to be honest. I'm a huge fan of your other stories, but this one seems so much different. It's hard to believe it's even written by you.
Snape doesn't really seem like Snape. He does insult Harry, but he's more sarcastic and less cruel usually. And he'd never treat Harry this way in canon. I almost want Harry to wake up at Hogwarts or Snap Dragon Manor and find out this was all a dream (and maybe then he'd appreciate Snape more ;-).
But that aside, I still like it. It's intriguing if nothing else. I find it a little strange right now, but I think you're going to surprise us completely. You've got something big planned -- I know it. ;-)
And poor Harry. He's going to try to escape, but we all know he's going to get caught. And Snape is going to...well, I don't even want to think of that.
Poor boy.
| Title: Chapter 2 - Morning Talks
| 14 Nov 2007 10:23 pm
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| Reviewer: SPA (Anonymous)
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Wow, this story is definitely quite dark and different, and very gripping! I can't wait to read more!! Poor Harry. But what's life without some Snape-induced Harry-angst? ;)
Haha, I love it! Poor little Harry, though. I would cry, too, if I were in his place. Yeah, I know he only cried over Hedwig, but I still think there was more to it. Too bad he doesn't know he's so close to where his mom grew up -- I'm sure that'd cheer him up. A smidge. Maybe.
I wonder what'll happen if Mrs. Figg never sees Harry around. Will she inform Dumbledore? Just a thought.
Can't wait for more!
As you say, this is definitely different. Not too many people write stories where the Dursleys need to rescue Harry from Snape-abuse. ;-)
Fact: You can't please every one. However, I absolutely LOVE this story! This is the first one I've ever read like it, and I actually don't see Snape as harshly in this story as some might. He is feeding Harry and giving him clothes and a place to sleep. This version of Snape reminds me very much of how he is in the 7th book.
I love the detailed descriptions. They give me this...Dickension vibe that I love.
I can't wait to see where you take this. Please continue it! People who are a bit put off by it probably are into the Snape-wears-a-fuzzy-sweater-and-takes-Harry-in-for-Holiday-tea-and-biscuits type of fics.
I'm not. And this is brilliant, so keep writing! :)
Hi! I love this story just as much if not more then 'A Time and Place to Grow.' However, I did notice a little inconsistancy. In the first chapter when Harry arrived Snape gave him a bath with warm water in an upstairs bathroom, but he didn't have to go outside pump the water then heat it, like Harry has to do in order to do the dishes. I'm not a plumber or anything so I don't know for sure, but if the upstairs bathroom has running warm water shouldn't the kitchen as well? Of course, its possible I'm just jumping the gun and you plan on explaining this latter, but that was kind of bothering me. *shrugs* After all Snape is a wizard prehaps he charmed the bathroom or something.
Anyway, excellent chapter as always, I can't wait to see what happens when Harry runs away. The second I read about the tree that was close enough to the ground for him to climb I had this vision of Harry trying to run away but only making it to the tree.
Well, I'll stop rambling now and end with this is an excellent story and I hope you update soon.
DaughterOfAres
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