I think this story is kind of cute actually. It's definatly funny. Poor Harry, the kid needs a break. Go Snape! Stupid Vernon *grr* Post again soon. I have to comment that in the last few chapters, this onne was fine though, there was some extra words and it made it a bit confusing.
| Title: Chapter 4
| 04 Jan 2008 11:29 pm
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| Reviewer: veritas427 (Anonymous)
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Hmm...interesting idea for a story. I can't wait to find out what happens next. But if I could make a suggestion, do a quick check over the writing before posting, as it looks like sometimes you were thinking about changing a word, and so there will be two consecutive words in a row that are the different words, but hold the same meaning. As a hint, sometimes it helps if you read the story or chapter outloud to yourself, it sounds kind of crazy, but it usually helps me when I am writing something for school or in other instances. It really helps to catch any errors that are left. Great job though! I can't wait to find out what Snape plans on saying to Dumbledore. Also, I wonder where Harry will be living for the summer, Snape's quarters at Hogwarts or the summer manor. I hope that you will update soon! Thanks for writing! Have a great day!
Dumbledore backed into a corner by Snape and McGonagall. This should prove interesting... Anyways, keep up the good work!
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