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Reviews For Cry
Wow! What a great start to your story! In the past, I didn't like reading fics where Harry gets sorted into Slytherin. It's stories like yours that made me change my mind :) It's so sad though. The other students harassing Harry and Snape caring for him only because of his long lost love Lily. I hope it gets better for Harry and Severus starts to see him more for himself.
The writing was not as smooth as it could be in the beginning of the chapter, but it seemed to pick up some as you went along. There were numerous places where the phrasing seemed a little off.
WOW. What a start to a fantastic story! This is so heartbreakingly believable for the characters to do and go through! All except for Ron, maybe. But there needs to be an antagonist. Wow poor Harry! Beautiful writing! I'm all tense from it. |
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