Excellent story: you plot well, your characterizations are believable, and your choices for behavior are interesting indeed. I don't want to lose what I've written so far by going back to check, but my impression is this story is a year and a half to two years old? That means you're unlikely to go back for corrections. Nevertheless, for future reference, you should know that the informal way of agreeing is commonly spelled "yeah". When you don't add the "h" to the end of "Yea", it's not the word you're looking for. "Yea" is pronounced "Yay", and is a more formal, even Biblical way of saying "yes". The last verse of "O Come All Ye Faithful" begins "Yea, Lord, we greet Thee, born this happy morning..." So just remember to add an "h" to its end to make the informal "yeah", man! (Here endeth the lesson! ;-)
| Title: Cry VIII
| 03 Jan 2008 5:39 am
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| Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous)
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Finally! Some relief for Harry at last! I finally caught up with numberous updates.
I am curious about the interaction with Narcissa and Severus... could there be chemestry there? The new trio is a nice twist as well. I hope you add more soon.
| Title: Cry VIII
| 02 Jan 2008 11:19 pm
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| Reviewer: Mistress Vamp (Anonymous)
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Brilliant. I love where this is going! ::MV::
I think I'm going to enjoy Harry, Hermione and Draco forming a Trio.
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