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Reviews For Lily's Charm
Great chapter, as always. Though, Harry isn't the only one left turning the conversation over in his mind... Hmm...
Author's Response: It's not that he's being patient, per se. He just doesn't want to argue with Harry, not after everything that's happened and Harry is trying to to the same, just like he promised in the hospital: that he would never disappoint his father again or some such if he would just get better. Poor, mixed-up Harry. :o(
As for Harry not eating or sleeping well the past week...did anyone really expect him to? Hellllooo, his father was in a coma, almost dead, and Harry was devestated. Of course, he's not going to be eating or sleeping! I wanted to laugh at Severus being annoyed with Remus for not making Harry eat. He really reminds me of those people, who don't have children themselves, who look at children and/or their parents, and say, "When I have kids, they'll always be...." or "I'll never do ...." And then eventually, have to eat their words. You know they do. I did love the interaction between Remus and Severus, though. I'd enjoy seeing a friendship develop there, too. I think it would be something they could both really benefit from, and it would be great for Harry. I was a little annoyed with Minerva, and she's usually one of my favorites, but she didn't seem the least bit understanding of Harry and Severus. Does she not understand that Harry needs some time to recover. Come on, Minnie, you know Sev will make sure Harry catches up on his studies, once he's recovered that is. I loved how Harry and Severus are trying so hard to take care of one another, and how they worry, and how fragile Harry seems, but I'm a huge angst and hurt/comfort lover. I can't wait to learn more about the Charm, too...you've got us all going with that one! Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter! I think these two are pretty well bonded now. I think you'll see next chapter that each now knows how much they need each other and how much they mean to one another. It's taken a bit to get there, but they finally did. I don't really think anyone expected Hary to just go about his business but that doesn't stop their concern for him. And yes, Severus really has no idea what he's in for trying to help Harry. He thinks simply ordering him about will work as that's just his natural style with his students. Let's see how well it works with his son. LOL I'm glad you enjoyed the Sev/Remus interaction. They are definitely going somewhere there. Minerva is having trouble accepting Severus as Harry's father. Harry is her Gryffindor and she was witness to lots of mistreatment by Sev over the years and I really don't think Minerva is a very forgiving lady. LOL She'll redeem herself though. That little scene was good for her. You'll see. Harry and Severus really are both kinda of mother hennish. LOL The Charm is up next. Hope you enjoy. :o)
Author's Response: Thank you very much. Especially that you like Severus. I'm partial to him myself. ;o)
Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you liked it so much! :o)
I am so sorry to learn about the loss of your Dad! My deepest condolences. It really puts this story in a new light and somehow makes it even more touching... It also makes me completely agree a child would be exceedingly worried about an ailing parent. My comment on the role reversal was referring more to an in general sense (and meant as merely an observation.) I would be an utter basket case should something happen to one of my parents. So no, I do not see anything wrong with Harry being vulnerable. I also did not mean to imply you were not writing him as a good/decent person. I am really sorry if it sounded that way. I just type away and know what I mean in my head but don't always convert it well to the page. Also, my comment on diminishing Harry was not referring to anything you have written thus far but more in reference to how you intend to conclude your fic. (very presumptuous, because I have no idea what your climax will entail.) I was envisioning Harry getting in over his head and Snape and the Charm coming to the rescue. Which is okay – I rather like to read about Harry in mortal danger. I was just hoping Harry could have some good moments too as it seems he has been at fault a lot. (I realize this is Harry putting the blame/guilt on himself and the only one truly to blame is Voldemort or in the case of Sirius: Voldemort and Bellatrix.) So anyway, don't spend much time thinking about the diminishing comment. I was just trying to say in your climax I hoped there would be enough heroics to go around. (I'm sure you have it all worked out.) I hope that makes sense – I think I am terrible at constructive criticism – as I truly didn't mean to criticize. I think I just put a lot of my random thoughts out there without putting them into context. But anyway, great job – and thanks again for the reply. Author's Response: :o) I wasn't offended at all. Just babbling myself. LOL You weren't critical, just made me ponder. I love to ponder. Okay, on to the conclusion. I think you'll enjoy what's up my sleeves here. No one will be coming to anyone's rescue here. :oP The Charm will come into play, but not to rescue Harry. Harry will ultimately have to face Voldemort...that's not to say he'll necessarily do it alone as it the book... rnrnI really did enjoy your comments. I like to hear how others see what I write and I enjoy going over what's in my head with them as well. I hope you keep reading and please do keep letting me know what you think. It helps me see things from another perspective and helps me improve as well. Thanks so much! :O)
LOL at your response to my Chapter 33 review. Thank you for replying. I confess that review was more in reaction to your Chapter 32 author's note (“Don’t hex me please. :oP I can’t help it if Severus doesn’t want to leave Lily. Would you want to leave such bliss?”) than the chapter you had actually written. I realize your comment was written more out of jest. Anyway, you are doing a wonderful job with your story. Your updates are amazing! I can hardly keep up – which is wonderful! I always have such an emotional reaction to your writing which goes to your credit. Harry, is obviously my favorite character so I get very defensive of him (like you with Snape.) I am guessing I am younger than you since your bio said you were married with kids. So for me, it is far more fun to read about Harry being hurt or in mortal danger than to see him so worried about the old guys - first Lupin, now Severus. I see Harry's extreme worry for Severus as a role reversal – i.e. parents usually worry far more about their kids than kids worry about their parents. I know your story has its' reasons - and in canon, you could see a bit of this too – i.e. I think Harry spent as much time worrying about Sirius as Sirius did about Harry. Interestingly, my high school English teacher once said part of why Harry Potter and a few of other children's books were so successful was because - the adults/parents were taken out of the the equation – i.e. You take an orphan and literally throw them to the wolves. In her opinion, it made it much more intense and satisfying to read about children being forced to solve their own problems without adults to rely on. I say this not because I don't love your plot line (Severus being Harry's father and stepping up to help) but because in canon a mere year later than the age you have Harry in your story – Harry, is able take down the dark lord with only the help of his friends. What I am trying to ask of you is - in giving Severus a more heroic role – Please do not diminish Harry. Harry is a Gryffindor and very talented in Defense Against the Dark Arts. Clearly, you are on your way to revealing it was Harry's fault Severus was nearly killed – (it was also partially his fault that Sirius was killed.) And now he is lying etc. I just wish everything wasn't his fault. In canon, though not perfect, Harry is fundamentally decent and his heart is nearly always in the right place. His instincts, according to Lupin were also almost always correct. Harry's promise to try to be perfect for his father seems very unbalanced - of the two characters, Snape has far more to make up for. I am sure you have plans to work that plot line out – we all know there are no perfect parents or perfect kids (well except one - if you are Christian.:)) I guess, I just don't see what Harry thinks he has to make up for – He had every right and many reasons to be slow to trust Snape. Again, don't get me wrong your plot has given me a great deal of empathy for Snape's character too. I do like that you are showing Harry is not completely incompetent at potions. The books always showed when Snape left Harry alone he was perfectly capable of brewing a decent potion. Also in the books, the fact that he scored one grade short of an outstanding in potions (his very least favorite subject) in a year that school work was not exactly at the top of his priority list – showed he had plenty of potential in the subject. I also like that you have Harry mastering occlumency (with Snape' help) earlier than he did in the books. This review is ridiculously long and rambling all over the place. You see how wrapped up I get into the lives of your imaginary characters? That is definitely a compliment to your writing! It is really great of you to reply to your reviews! I hope you don't hate this one. I have one odd question for you – When you write do you picture your characters as they look in the films or do you see them differently in your own mind? (Even though I love Alan Rickman I always see my own version of each of the characters. My Harry is very Hot. LOL! :)) Thank you for writing and sharing! Author's Response: All right...Hmmm...I hope this will make sense. Harry is not trying to make up for anything. Here's my theory on this whole Harry trying to be perfect (which by the way will not last...LOL). When people grieve, they got through a stage called 'bargaining' and that's what Harry was doing in the Infirmary when he made all those wild promises never to do anything wrong again. "I'll do anything...just please get better."-type thing. He's not being rational and he doesn't think he's done anything wrong really (ie not trying to make up for any sins), he just is trying to strike a deal (maybe with the powers that be) that Snape will be okay. And so now that Snape is back, Harry is walking around on tenterhooks because he's afraid to go back on his 'deal'. Remember, he's not being wholly rational. LOL Nothing here is his fault, though. And again, he's not trying to make up for anything as he really hasn't done anything...he's just scared to lose Sev. I've tried to portray him as decent. He takes care of Severus when he's sick and ponders over whether or not to just let Sev stay happy with Lily and feels guilty that he feels selfish. I think he's trying to be a good person. rnrnI do agree with your English Prof. Lots of successful kid's books are because of the hero being an orphan. My own take is a bit different. I lost my dad when I was 16 so I am not a fan so much of orphan stories. LOL And really this story is a lot about my own catharsis...what would I feel if my dad was either still around or could come back from the dead. LOL And yes, there is some role reversal right now as Severus is healing, but I don't think it is very out of the ordinary for a child to care more for a parent, especially when ailing. Again, I speak from experience. And yes, Harry did defeat Voldemort with only the help of his friends which I enjoyed but it's not so very realistic. LOL And all these said friends survived. Very odd, I guess. rnrnI guess I wasn't thinking that I was diminishing Harry. And I am not sure I'm trying to give Snape a hero's role. He hasn't really done anything heroic. Hmmm...I will have to think on that. If you mean because Harry has been vulnerable, I guess I don't see that as a weakness. I am a Hufflepuff though, so I tend to view emotions as a strength. LOL I love Harry too; he's my favorite character as well. Hmmm...I really must ponder this diminishing issue. :oP rnrnThanks for the review...I love to have things to think about....Oh, and I don't really picture Alan Rickman in my head. I think of a Handsomer version maybe... But, I am more apt to picture Dan as my Harry, though I guess I see him as being a bit more hot as well. LOL I love both of them. :o)
Thank you for inviting us on a thrilling ride through your world. Ummm, and if Harry truly thinks he can keep his promise about not arguing with his dad he's in for a startling surprise. Author's Response: LOL Yeah, that's not gonna last for long. ;o) At least not once Sev figures out what Harry's trying to do. LOL I'm so thrilled you're enjoying the story so much. Don't worry about reviewsing...I'm just happy you like it. :o)
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