Nice use of adjectives... this seems quite original.
Pretty good! I'm interested in what happens next. I'm dying to see how badly Harry's hurt and whether Snape meant to take Harry with them when they left. Good writing!
| Title: Chapter 1
| 28 Nov 2007 10:30 am
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| Reviewer: Rhea (Signed)
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Well, I'm waiting for the next chapter.
Let the inspiration be with you!)))))
| Title: Chapter 1
| 28 Nov 2007 9:54 am
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| Reviewer: Claire (Anonymous)
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Good writing style. Just a couple of cultural differences - you used a raccoon, which we don't have in England (a squirrel or fox would have been better) and had Vernon worrying about paying for Harry to go to hospital - hospital treatment is free in the UK for UK citizens.
Author's Response: Ah yeah, I forgot about the hospital thing. I looked up raccoons.. they said there were some there so i thought i was safe :( oh well hehe
Excellent start, I love how you have Severus run hot and cold one minute he's concerned for Harry and the next he can't wait to leave him there. Keep up the great work, looking forward to reading more. LES
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