this is such a cool story please write more
| Title: Chapter 6 - Food
| 26 Nov 2008 2:27 pm
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| Reviewer: La Mariane (Anonymous)
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I've just discovered your story and I like it.
I'm glad that Harry is taking a stance against abuse; Dumbledore was his mentor and he believed in second chances and expecting the best of people: I can see Harry jusitfying his present behaviour like this.
and I hope that Draco will be treated better: how can you expect someone to change his whole way of life if you don't give them hope that things will improve? I think they (meaning Harry) should make Draco study, to give him an intellectual interest: doing housework all day will not help him reform and he will have a lot of time to stew in his thoughts.
update soon please, but could you go easy on the angst for the next chapter? I know the themes of the story are serious but they all could do with a laugh!
Harry is thinking like a muggle. He's forgetting about wizardspace! If a tent can have multiple rooms inside, then surely he can have a few rooms magically added to the old Black house. Maybe Kreacher could help Harry here.
I really like that you're showing Harry attempting to man up and take a stand for something. This is a much more realistic look at the new wizarding world than the candy-coated one that a lot of people use. Well done!
Okay. I'm really enjoying this story - I think it's a brilliant idea - but I do have one or two complaints.
Firstly, given that she's suggesting her own sister should be Kissed, don't you think Andromeda Tonks is being a little heartless? I know we don't see much of her character in the books, but I can't help thinking that, given she's lost most of her family, she might be a little reluctant to have her sister killed/Kissed, even if they haven't spoken for years.
Also, and this is just a nit-picking thing that comes from being British, we have streets. Not blocks. That's purely American.
| Title: Chapter 6 - Food
| 16 Mar 2008 8:08 am
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| Reviewer: Tracy (Signed)
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OK, here's the plan, no more school or work for you! From now on, you just write for my entertainment. Of course, I'm willing to be magnanimous enough to allow others to enjoy your stories too, mustn't be selfish or anything. What? I think it's a good plan! OK, so there are some small flaws in it like, writing fanfiction doesn't pay except in feedback and you can't actually live off feedback, but I'm working on those details. LOL! I know I say this about all your stories hon, but this was brilliant!
Tracy
Thank you so much for updating! I've been looking forward to this chapter! I love how arrogant Snape is when he thinks he's going to leave in the afternoon. Ha ha, I doubt it.
I love this story. You've got so much potential for growth in characters here. I can't wait for Harry and Draco to start getting along, but I'm sure it will take some time. I think you also did a great job with Harry and Snape's interaction. Snape won't want Harry to be the one to help him, so he snarks. Harry is just too depressed and tired to really fight back, but he also knows it's best not to. Eventually, this will give Snape food for thought. Now I'm ready for Harry to rein Kreacher in. ;-)
| Title: Chapter 6 - Food
| 05 Mar 2008 12:38 am
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| Reviewer: Ayana (Anonymous)
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I REALLY love your story, please update soon
OOh, what's happening to Draco? Poor thing, I feel sorry for him. Can't wait fo rthe next bit, thank you!
-Elise
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