Your writing is funny and enjoyable, thank you.
Title: Chapter 2
| 17 Dec 2016 8:01 pm
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Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Poor Severus! He does get the short end of the straw!
I think it was great to read this from Snape's point of view. I really quitel enjoyed this one.
Just a note of correction, it's " a roll of his eyes", not "a role of his eyes". :)
I love your voice. Absolutely hilarious!
Loved it. I loved Snape's comment to Dobby about knowing the way the the heads office.LOL
Snape is very in character. Great work.
I kind of like this. It's a good set-up, drawing out the meeting between Harry and Snape. Please update soon and give us something to read over Christmas.
I can't imagine how Snape will keep an eye on Harry - I see a lot of missed sleep and headaches since Harry was far from the ideal student in the 5th book.
Keep writing.
You have set this story up nicely. The reactions of everyone are believable and well-written and the situation that puts Severus in charge of Harry also makes sense given Book 5 canon. I'm looking forward to this story.
Title: Chapter 2
| 13 Dec 2007 10:02 am
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Reviewer: Becky (Anonymous)
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Citisen? What's a 'citisen?' Did you mean 'citizen?' Also, what does 'cal' mean? Did you intend to write 'call?'
I suggest you get a beta reader to help you with your spelling, grammar and punctuation. Your story would be a lot better if you took the time to fix the typos. Not to be mean, but your story sloppily written. I like your banner though.
Poor Severus, he's misserable. Although, it dose make a funny read ;) Please, please post the next chapter soon, I'm really enjoying this story so far and would like more to read.
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