Poor Severus, he's misserable. Although, it dose make a funny read ;) Please, please post the next chapter soon, I'm really enjoying this story so far and would like more to read.
| Title: Chapter 2
| 12 Dec 2007 11:23 am
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| Reviewer: Eva (Signed)
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It was nice, especially, your Snape. It sounded just like him to say that Flitwick! *shakes her head* Anyway, all in all, the chapter was really nice and now I hope to read more of it, soon.
Hehee, Snape was great! I loved it!
Good chapter! I really liked the take on Severus' point of view here. Good work so far and I am looking forward to reading more soon!
| Title: Chapter 2
| 11 Dec 2007 3:27 pm
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| Reviewer: Anna (Anonymous)
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I liked this chapter. Looking forward to the next one.
| Title: Chapter 2
| 11 Dec 2007 2:35 pm
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| Reviewer: ER (Anonymous)
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"Your gift is going back tomorrow!"
Lol!
This story sounds like it will be very entertaining, please post the next chapter soon!
This has great potential. One point, however. Dumbledore was present when Ron asked Harry not to come with them and Harry agreed. Yet he is depicted as being ignorant of this which doesn't make sense. If DD didn't overhear the boys' conversation (unlikely as they were standing a few feet from him) then you need to make this clear and Harry shouldn't wish for DD to intervene.
Alternately, if DD did hear the conversation, "We don't have time for this, Harry," is out of place. Something along the lines of, "Harry has his reasons," would be more in character. Also, Dumbledore shouldn't have "suspicions" about Harry's reasons, but should simply choose not to tell MM.
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