Hmm. A very nice concept and spin on the original book with some of your own flair thrown in. However, there are quite a few grammatical mistakes and other things that make it a little difficult to read. Id recommend having a friend help edit and fix it.
Loved the story! I take it that you don't like Hermione or Ron. Can't fault you on Ron but I do like Hermione even if she can be a bit much sometimes. I like that you gave Neville more to do and that Cedric was in it. This is only the second story that I have read that Harry (as male or female) has been a Ravenclaw. Why didn't you have more of Arielle's Ravenclaw housemates in the story? I look forward to reading Book Two.
That was great i loved your entire story read it in one go... loved Papa Sev and Elle really great relationship. hope Book 2 is in the works
Author's Response: It is - but it stopped at chapter 8... totally bad writer's block. I'm trying to go back to writing it again though. ^^ I'll post the story here soonish.
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