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Reviews For Following Tradition
the interaction the old walls the new ideas and the magic of the children and the holiday awesome job Author's Response: Thanks!
Severus stepping out... that was perfect. Just what I can imagine him doing. ( : Severus and his grandchildren... just right, considering that you gave them some offstage time to talk and bond. Overall this was great! Good luck in the ficfest! Author's Response: Thank you! I loved writing Severus and his grandchildren they were just so adorable.:) I tried not to make it too sappy, by putting a few lighter moments in (like Ron getting smacked or Sev's "Get over it"). Thanks for the review and the luck!
Author's Response: Thank you! For reasons I'm not quite sure of, Severus had to love his grandchildren before he could ever possibly open his heart to Harry or anyone else. And what better place for him to realize this than at the Burrow with a huge family. I'm glad you loved my story, and thanks for the review!
I loved your take on Severus. You still kept him the snarky potions professor we adore and (in agreeing with a previous reviewer because I can't find another word that works so well) humanized him. LOVED his attachment to his grandchildren. And even in his reactions to THEM he still stays in character for me, and doesn't turn into a giant human marshmellow which would have ruined him. It was so understandable how overwhelmed he would be at the Burrow, and I loved how everyone helped him fit in. Every character was well written and "sounded" just like JK herself had written their dialog (though you gave me much more...but I'll go back to that momentarily). Adored Arthur welcoming Severus to "grandfatherhood" and Ron's astonishment to the gifts was spot on for their characters for me. And Harry yelling "Granddad has presents" - that made me laugh out loud. Great scene! Harry and Severus' talk at the end was incredibly touching. I got a big old lump in my throat! I'm so glad they found their own ways to relate and care about each other. They really do both need each other! Loved Harry's hug! One of the reasons I enjoyed this so much is because I felt rather irritated by portions of Deathly Hallows. I hated what happened to Severus at the end, and I wanted more of the "grown-up" characters (far more than I got in the epilogue). I realize JK couldn't necessarily give me that without writing another book, but YOU gave me a wonderful scenario of just what I wanted. This reader gives you a big thank-you! It was a terrific story from beginning to end. Author's Response: Thank you for the amazing review! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I must say, I don't know which oneshot I'm prouder of: this one or the Aesops Fables one. It wasn't nearly as hard to keep Severus in character, though a bit mellower, as it was to make Harry sound right. He's probable the character I have the most problem with and I was afriad that I'd changed him to much, even if he is an adult now. I cannot take full credit for the Arthur welcoming Severus to grandfatherhood scene. I orginally had it written within just two lines, but I knew something was amiss. Pointing this out to my beta she assisted me, suggesting I reveal a bit more of Severus's emotions. Even then though I was afriad it wasn't entirely clear, but decided to leave it, because, as my beta pointed out, the subtly of the scene is what makes it good. You were not alone in being disappointed in the seventh book and I believe it is safe to say we were all left wanting. Thank you, again!
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks! For whatever reason Severus is the character I find easist to write. Harry on the other hand...*sigh* Thanks, again!
I love seeing Harry as a Daddy and you've written the children just as I've imagined them to be. I'm hoping you will have more chapters of this story, but seeing how you ended it with a The End doesn't look too promsing, does it? Anyway, thanks so much for sharing your sweet little Christmas story. I truly enjoyed it. Merry Christmas! Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the children. They were the easy part. The Harry/Severus scene at the end was probably the most difficult. And, no I don't plan on continueing this story, but I may write one similiar. Thank you for reviewing. Merry Christmas!
I loved the end. The way you've written Albus Severus is just really wonderful. The knowing look between Arthur and Severus was done perfectly, and you tweaked it brilliantly. Thanks so much for sharing this story with us. You have a great talent for writing :) Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you thankyouthankyouthankyou! I couldn't have done it without your help Jade, you are a great writer and I'm sure that without your help it would not have been nearly as good. I'm glad you liked the ending. I actually had a bit of trouble with it. I wrote at least six different endings before finding one I liked. Thank you, again! P.S. The advertisement was the least I could do. ;)
I would like to see the one about young Albus Sev and Scorpius finding a surprise in the shack. Although, it would irritate me to no end to find out that Sev's body had never been recovered or buried. Of course, as one fanfic writer states: No body No grave No portrait NOT DEAD!! Author's Response: LOL. Thanks! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the story! I may write the story about Albus and Scorpius finding a way to bring Severus back. Though actually its Severus portriat that reveals there is a way to bring him back, but not until a certian point in the story because until then Severus (portriat) has no desire to come back. Thanks for the reveiw!
I loved how he has warmed up so to his grandchildren, and how he has finally let Harry into his heart. It's sad that it couldn't have happened earlier, but better late than never. I'm so happy that he did accept the invitation to the Burrow, and I can imagine his consternation at the overflow of people, especially rowdy excitable children. And the little talk with Harry was touching, and I'm glad Severus has seen his own mistakes---how he let bitterness over his wrongs take over, and deny him a lot of pleasures he could have had at a later point. All in all, it was a wonderful story! Thank you for writing it! Author's Response: Thank you! I really like the idea of Snape becomeing 'Dumbledore like' as he gets older, maybe not as ecentric or 'twinkly' but calm and wise. The way I saw his character, Severus had to warm up to his grandchildren first before he could even begin to love Harry. He had spent so much time hating Harry that he needed a chance to start over with his grandchildren. In a sense his relationship with young Albus is not unlike the one he could have had with Harry had things been different. When I first wrote it, before I even sent it to Jade for beta'ing, I had the kids being quite as though walking on eggshells around their grandfather, because their parents had told them too. But having them as typical kids seemed to work so much better. The scene with Harry and Severus talking was one of the hardest to write. I actually couldn't decided what to have them talk about, then I had Severus telling a detailed story about what Christmas was like when he was small. Eventually though it seemed to write itself almost. Once again I'm really glad you enjoyed my story. Thanks for the review!
p.s Have you given any thought to write an extended story like this but focusing on Severus with the boys at Hogwarts, with him both as teacher and grandfather. Just an idea, I think you'd do a great job of it. Author's Response: Believe it or not Severus was the character that gave me the least amount of problems. Harry is always a difficult write for me trying to make him both kid like and adult like was even more difficult. I actually had an idea for a similar story, the beta for my brothers and fathers series was going to co-author it with me and we have the first chapter almost complete, but... well I'm not sure I like it anymore. Like in this story Severus was mellow and snarky at the same time, and so in love with his grandchildren it was ridiculious, but he was not saved by Fawks in the shrieking shack. Instead young Albus and his best friend Scoripus would go on a little adventure and make some discoveries that would eventurally result bring Severus back through his portriat. Actually thats not a good summary, but like I said its still in the making. Thanks again, and I loved that you loved my story. :) Thanks for the review! |
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