Wow. I never expected such a different scenario but still the same you know. I am still angry at Snape but I'm surprised athow he's not even trying to understand this Harry.
I love how real the angst is in this. None of the four main characters are handling their situations well. Then Harry goes and makes that dirty accusation? Yikes. I guess no one is tactful at 13 though.
-P.G.
Author's Response: Probably not. That's why I loved picking that age--so rough around the edges, so much potential for conflict. :)
Wow, quite a bit of angst here and done so well, I can't believe what Harry accused Snape of, but it is disturbing what you say in anger which is why that statement seemed so plausible.
Author's Response: He's also responding to his own history with the Snape of the other world, and the anger and hatred he associates with Voldemort and his followers. All his pent-up feelings came out in that scene.
You must know by now (I've left about 5 or 6 reviews) how excellent I consider your writing. Therefore, please understand I'm not being critical if I observe that the noun "legilimens" refers to someone who performs "legilimancy". In the 19th from the bottom paragraph which begins "James Potter was the focus of the attack", I think Severus would be telling Harry either:"It took all my skill in Potions and Legilimancy" OR: "It took all my skill in Potions and as a Legilimens", to use the right form of the noun in that sentence.
Forgive my temerity; you've got a Ferrari here--I'm simply handing you a tool to keep it purring perfectly.
Author's Response: Oh, I don't mind...I don't have a beta, so I'm happy if the readers can point out things that need fixing. Just don't expect an immediate edit; I barely have free time to add new chapters right now. I will look at it later, though.
Some of your jumping back & forth has been a little confusing for the rest of us, not just Harry, Snape, et al!
Author's Response: I think this is the biggest problem with the fic: the jumping back and forth is confusing. I've done what I could to make it clear, but the nature of the story make the jumps necessary, I'm afraid.
| Title: Chapter 5: The World, Altered
| 16 Jan 2008 7:32 pm
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| Reviewer: Hanka (Anonymous)
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Poor Harry, he's all alone.
Author's Response: Yes, he's not going to have an easy time of it.
| Title: Chapter 5: The World, Altered
| 04 Jan 2008 6:01 am
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| Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
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Oi. So far this is amazing. I hope you continue ASAP!
-K
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I'll update regularly.
Oh, poor Severus. I can think this might be even worse in some ways than knowing you caused someone's death. I'll be interested to see how the new Harry deals with the mind-magic stuff compared to the old Harry.
Author's Response: Yes, AU Snape has to deal with the consequences of his choices on a much more constant basis than canon Snape. Thank you for your thoughts!
| Title: Chapter 5: The World, Altered
| 03 Jan 2008 9:54 pm
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| Reviewer: ariel (Anonymous)
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That is so unfair, who is suppose to be the adult! It was Snape fault, I would be worried if he is with her for pity and guilt, and the way he reacted for me it would be a sign that he is afraid to hear the truth. Ignorance is not an excuse.
Author's Response: You'll get lots more of Snape and Harry's thoughts on the situation. The joy of Harry and Snape is that they see the world so differently, and clash horns, yet they often both have a valid point to make. Thank you for the feedback!
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