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Reviews For Never Say Remember
Awww, Snape was super sweet at the end of this chapter.
-P.G. Author's Response: The odds are good... :)
The only 'negative' of this chapter wash that is seemed a little disjointed, I think with the varying time frames covered it needed to be a bit longer consequently with more detail to smooth the way from one scene to the next. Otherwise I really enjoyed learning more pieces of the puzzle. Author's Response: Originally this chapter only had the scene in the present day. That felt too short, so I included more backstory, as I felt it related to what was happening in the present. But it's been a while since I've read it--I may look at it now and see where more of a transition could have been used. Thank you for the review!
"He tried to smile, but only managed a grimace. He ducked his head, letting his hair veil his face. It was a gesture left over from adolescence, and one of the many aspects of his body language he'd rigorously drummed out of himself as he learned Occlumency." **I just loved the fact that Severus felt so vulnerable in front of Lily. It was a lovely description and said so much about what kind of person Severus is. Seriously, keep up the excellent writing. I'm just so impressed with this. Author's Response: Thank you! I wanted to show that this wasn't a one-sided relationship. They can both be vulnerable, each needing the other.
One thing I really enjoyed about it I suppose is that you didn't spend chapter's and pages on how the Harry's switched and it didn't take long for them to realize what the problem was. For a lot of stories that deal with plans of existence so much time is spent trying to figure out whats going on it takes away from everything else. Also, you characterizations are brillant! You manage to keep both Snape in character somehow. I'm really sorry that I didn't read this story as soon as it was posted, but I must say that now I'm hooked. Please update soon. Author's Response: Ha! "extreme boredom," you say? Well, my thanks go out to the January blahs, as they've driven you to click on my story! In the early stages of writing, I toyed with the idea of working in more of a plot involving the AUs, but it simply bored me; I didn't want to write a story about AUs in a Star Trek sort of way. The AU is really an opportunity to put Snape & Harry in a difficult situation and force them to interact. So I focused on what I wanted: writing pages and pages of dialogue between them. And no apology needed…just keep reading & letting me know what you think! Thank you for the review!
Now that's sad! And Lily must be almost like salt in a wound for this Severus, as much as he loves her. Author's Response: Well, you live with your choices. Literally, in his case. Thank you so much for continuing to post your reactions!
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PLEASE post again soon! Beth Author's Response: Well, I don't want you to have an emotional breakdown! How about if Snape gets too sad, I send him over to your place for hugs? :) I'm happy you're enjoying it!
Author's Response: Thanks! It's over 1/4 done now…I'll be sad when it's over. It's been so great seeing everyone's reactions!
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