Lovely detail with the potion at the end to bring how crippled he is (for his line of work) into focus.
Oh, you have a typo in this chapter -- "strange" for "stranger" He now owed a nearly complete strange
| Title: We All Start in the Streams
| 17 Oct 2009 12:00 pm
|
| Reviewer: Ash (Signed)
| [Report This]
|
It was a good story so far and I enjoyed but am getting off the train here.
I have never understood the need of many authors to go ahead and mutilate a character. The repercussions are severe, frankly I think the rest of us can't imagine them, and well, I am yet to see anyone do it justice in their descriptions. They also do not add to a story at all, just detract from it. Meh, I am sorry you went down this road but when Severus started missing body parts that was it for me. It was a good story until then, so thank you for that.
*tears in eyes* Oh my God. Poor Severus! When I read about what he lost from the torture, I couldn't help but cry. It's so sad! Why? Why'd you have to do that? You've made me one VERY upset reader, not to mention Severus lover. I realy liked this story and now you've made my cry. I'm going to continue reading now and sulk. *sniffs*
|