| Title: Chapter 11: An Occlumency Lesson and Pranking
| 06 Jun 2008 3:53 pm
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| Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed)
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This was a fun chapter with lots of good things set up for the future. Of course, I'm eager to find out what the Gryffindors have planned. And you are doing a great job of giving Harry a look at what Slytherins are really like and giving the Slytherins a chance to see Harry's compassion. But you desperately need to have this betaed more closely. There were several "would of"s instead of "would have"s. There were several misspelled words. In one place "wand" became "and". It really broke up the flow of this very good story.
Author's Response: (Wince) I'm sorry about the mistakes Sun. I'll go over the chapter again ans re-post it. I need to do that with the entire story come to think of it. Thank you for the review, it meant a lot.
Ohhhh i wonder what they have got planned? lol.
Author's Response: You will just have to wait and see, lol. Sorry Cecilia, I will tell you that it involves the Giant Squid, (wink). Thanks for the review!
| Title: Chapter 11: An Occlumency Lesson and Pranking
| 06 Jun 2008 6:43 am
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| Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed)
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Awesome! Well, it seems like Draco and Harry are getting along much better now and I liked all the classes and I wonder why Sev trusts Draco not to reveal Harry's secret once the bond is broken. Can't wait to see what Harry has in store for Draco.
Author's Response: Yep, there getting along okay. Nothing has happened yet for them not to. Thank you for your review!
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