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Reviews For A Shocking Discovery
Now, back to the start of the chapter: I thought that the parallel sections of Severus and Harry being introspective were nicely done. You've lain a nice foundation for the rest of the story, I think. Severus' musings on Theodore Nott were intriguing. I look forward to seeing, as I read the rest of the story, if we readers get to see more of Nott and what his agenda really is. I also like how you use just the right amount of physical description along with your dialogue. I can picture things clearly in my head as I read, but I don't feel bombarded with a surfeit of detail that drags me away from the characters. On to Chapter 2! (And I apologize in advance if the next review you see is the one for the latest posted chapter... if this tale is as good as "Severus Snape and the Muggle", I'll be hitting the next chapter button fast, to see what happens next.) Author's Response: Once again, thank you for your lovely review. I hope you enjoy this tale as much as you did Muggle. Lesley~
Now, back to the start of the chapter: I thought that the parallel sections of Severus and Harry being introspective were nicely done. You've lain a nice foundation for the rest of the story, I think. Severus' musings on Theodore Nott were intriguing. I look forward to seeing, as I read the rest of the story, if we readers get to see more of Nott and what his agenda really is. I also like how you use just the right amount of physical description along with your dialogue. I can picture things clearly in my head as I read, but I don't feel bombarded with a surfeit of detail that drags me away from the characters. On to Chapter 2! (And I apologize in advance if the next review you see is the one for the latest posted chapter... if this tale is as good as "Severus Snape and the Muggle", I'll be hitting the next chapter button fast, to see what happens next.)
Fortunately I discovered that you have indeed written several more chapters. That's my roundabout way of telling you 'it starts off quite nicely'. :) --Taryn
I liked the way you described Snape's thoughts on his students, especially Theodore Nott (and I wonder if he will play a more important part later on in your story). And the part where you explained about the relationship between young, easy to impress, Severus and older, self-confident Lucius was very well done, too, I thought! I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter. Author's Response: Hi there Asterix. Welcome on board. So pleased you have started ASD. Thank you for the review. Glad you enjoyed it. Lesley
great work!!! im soo excited to read the rest of this, its 12:53 am, gosh!!! :( Author's Response: Ah, another reader...wonderful! Thank you for your review. So glad you liked the beginning. Now a review for each chapter would be really lovely. :D Each review is greatly appreciated. ~LesleY~
Author's Response: The end may be many chapters away, but i hope you continue to read and enjoy. Thanks for the review. Lesley
Author's Response: Thank you Lunaz for your kind words. Most people seem to love all the detail I go into and yet, it is not something I set out to d--at least, not to the extent I do. I start writing and I can't seem to stop with all the little extras. At least, I think most people like it. Perhaps it drives some crazy. Glad you like the James/Sev connection. Please keep reading and I would love to hear from you again.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I have 16 chapters already written and I do do both points of view. I know the Harry/Ginny ship annoys a lot of readers, but i love it and I figure that poor Harry gets enough flack, so a little bit of pleasure is very much deserved. Please keep on reading.
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Yay, you're my first reviewer. Thanks for that.And thanks for all your help. That whole speel on formatting is just so confusing because it says not to upload from a wors document. And I have no idea what tiny MCE is. Do you? Just a quick question, and I hope you don't mind me asking it here. When i clicked on story preview, all the text was bunched together, even though my paragraphs are seperated in the word document. Any idea why? Do I need to seperate it further? Will wait for your reply so that I don't have to go thru the whole of the next chapter seperating the text. |
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