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Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 14 Jan 2012 2:42 am
Reviewer: Rhyselle (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, I loved Ginny taking the initiative! :) And how she told Hermione to do so as well, since Ron was lallygagging. *grin*

    Now, back to the start of the chapter: I thought that the parallel sections of Severus and Harry being introspective were nicely done. You've lain a nice foundation for the rest of the story, I think. Severus' musings on Theodore Nott were intriguing. I look forward to seeing, as I read the rest of the story, if we readers get to see more of Nott and what his agenda really is.

    I also like how you use just the right amount of physical description along with your dialogue. I can picture things clearly in my head as I read, but I don't feel bombarded with a surfeit of detail that drags me away from the characters.

    On to Chapter 2! (And I apologize in advance if the next review you see is the one for the latest posted chapter... if this tale is as good as "Severus Snape and the Muggle", I'll be hitting the next chapter button fast, to see what happens next.)

    Author's Response:

    Once again, thank you for your lovely review. I hope you enjoy this tale as much as you did Muggle.

    Lesley~

Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 14 Jan 2012 2:41 am
Reviewer: Rhyselle (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, I loved Ginny taking the initiative! :) And how she told Hermione to do so as well, since Ron was lallygagging. *grin*

    Now, back to the start of the chapter: I thought that the parallel sections of Severus and Harry being introspective were nicely done. You've lain a nice foundation for the rest of the story, I think. Severus' musings on Theodore Nott were intriguing. I look forward to seeing, as I read the rest of the story, if we readers get to see more of Nott and what his agenda really is.

    I also like how you use just the right amount of physical description along with your dialogue. I can picture things clearly in my head as I read, but I don't feel bombarded with a surfeit of detail that drags me away from the characters.

    On to Chapter 2! (And I apologize in advance if the next review you see is the one for the latest posted chapter... if this tale is as good as "Severus Snape and the Muggle", I'll be hitting the next chapter button fast, to see what happens next.)
Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 20 Jul 2009 9:39 pm
Reviewer: Ivy-Green (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow. Poor Snape...but rock on Harry!
Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 20 Apr 2009 4:23 am
Reviewer: Taryn (Signed) [Report This]
    For the record, I couldn't find the 'next' button for a moment (I'm using the Marauders' skin and getting used to it..) and I was like WAIT, WHAT DO YOU MEAN THERE'S ONLY ONE CHAPTER and I decided that I was probably going to send you an annoyed owl.

    Fortunately I discovered that you have indeed written several more chapters.

    That's my roundabout way of telling you 'it starts off quite nicely'. :)

    --Taryn
Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 22 Jan 2009 11:32 pm
Reviewer: Asterix Tutnix (Signed) [Report This]
    Good start!
    I liked the way you described Snape's thoughts on his students, especially Theodore Nott (and I wonder if he will play a more important part later on in your story). And the part where you explained about the relationship between young, easy to impress, Severus and older, self-confident Lucius was very well done, too, I thought!
    I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.

    Author's Response:

    Hi there Asterix. Welcome on board. So pleased you have started ASD.

    Thank you for the review. Glad you enjoyed it.

    Lesley

Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 22 Sep 2008 8:53 am
Reviewer: ak carmel (Anonymous) [Report This]
    brillant brilliant brilliant chapter!!!
    great work!!!
    im soo excited to read the rest of this, its 12:53 am, gosh!!! :(

    Author's Response:

    Ah, another reader...wonderful! Thank you for your review. So glad you liked the beginning.

    Now a review for each chapter would be really lovely. :D

    Each review is greatly appreciated.

    ~LesleY~

Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 26 Feb 2008 10:51 pm
Reviewer: Muggleprincess (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Can't wait to see the end

    Author's Response:

    The end may be many chapters away, but i hope you continue to read and enjoy.

     Thanks for the review.

    Lesley

Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 14 Jan 2008 4:45 am
Reviewer: Lunaz (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Very nicely done. Love the little bits of info you incorporate into your story about the different characters. Snape and James first cousins from a set of twin siblings is a very interesting surprise to the story. Love to see where you go with this.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you Lunaz for your kind words.

    Most people seem to love all the detail I go into and yet, it is not something I set out to d--at least, not to the extent I do. I start writing and I can't seem to stop with all the little extras.

    At least, I think most people like it. Perhaps it drives some crazy.

    Glad you like the James/Sev connection.

    Please keep reading and I would love to hear from you again.

Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 14 Jan 2008 3:47 am
Reviewer: Alexis8907 (Signed) [Report This]
    Good start. I like how you shifted from Severus' point of view to Harrys. Are you planning on doing that for future chapters? The Ginny suddenly kissing Harry scene was a bit unexpected but I liked it. You really showed Harry's teenage boy thoughts well. Good start and I look forward to reading more soon!

    Author's Response:

    Thank you for your review.

    I have 16 chapters already written and I do do both points of view.

    I know the Harry/Ginny ship annoys a lot of readers, but i love it and I figure that poor Harry gets enough flack, so a little bit of pleasure is very much deserved.

    Please keep on reading.

Title: Chapter 1: End of Year. 14 Jan 2008 3:24 am
Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous) [Report This]
    YAY! You got it uploaded. Of course, I've read it before but still loved it. Especially Harry and Ginny, of course!

    Author's Response:

     

    Yay, you're my first reviewer. Thanks for that.And thanks for all your help.

    That whole speel on formatting is just so confusing because it says not to upload from a wors document. And I have no idea what tiny MCE is. Do you? 

    Just a quick question, and I hope you don't mind me asking it here. When i clicked on story preview, all the text was bunched together, even though my paragraphs are seperated in the word document. Any idea why? Do I need to seperate it further?

    Will wait for your reply so that I don't have to go thru the whole of the next chapter seperating the text.


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