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Reviews For A Shocking Discovery
Author's Response: You are doing a marathon effort with all of these reviews. It's fantastic reading all of your comments. You asked how long I was going to make the story...answer: I don't know. I am just basically going with the flow. And how often do I update: I aim for fortnightly and it is usually within a day or two either way of the fortnight. I have another work that is on ff.net and I alternate updating the two of them. At the moment, I am working on 'Severus Snape and the Muggle.' This story doesn't fit the criteria for P&S (I don't think) because although Harry and Severus both have major roles and there is a lot of interplay between them, the main interplay is between Sev and a OFC...a muggle. You might want to check it out when you finish chapter 28 of ASD ~LesleY~
Am greatly enjoying the story! I read it over several nights, but of course, that meant I now have to wait for updates! (The disadvantage of catching up on one's reading...) The characterizations are spot-on, even down to Harry being a pain in the rear (his teen angst drove me crazy in the books; I have a difficult time relating to the character!). The plot line is excellent; I like the cliffhangers, some big, some small. It gives the reader time to breathe! I suppose if forced to critique something, it might be the typos: their/they're/there, to/too, apostrophe placement, etc. BUT, there aren't many, and you have to understand that I'm hyper-sensitive to them in formal writing (not in notes such as this). It's obvious to me that they're typos only, because you have an excellent grasp of grammar and sentence structure. Don't sweat it, Lesley; it's the only negative thing I could think of, and it's very, very minor. Fabulous job! Will anxiously await updates, but I understand all too well about real life... Kay Author's Response: Thanks so much for a lovely review Kay. I'm so glad that you like the story, even if you don't like Harry. You don't think that he might have had just a little justification to be a bit angsty in the books. He did have a truly horrible life, after all. The only really contented time he ever had, he can't remember. And reall, I listen to the books over and over while working in the kitchen (I have the British audio books) and I really don't think Harry was all that angry except in those very specific circumstances like when Sirius died and he found out about Snape being the one to betray his parents. And of course with Ron in the last book, but even you must admit, that was mainly Ron. He was angry in OOTP but he had just been tortured and see n the return of the man who was going to stop at nothing to kill him, and it seemjed as if DD had dropped him like a hot cake. Anyway, we obviously have different opinions of Harry and we would probably never agree about him, so, moving on... Sorry about the typos...and you are right, they are typos. I am very particular myself about punctuation and grammar; I do know the differnence between all of the examples that you gave. I read and reread before I upload, but some things obviously get through. I don't have a beta but I have read many a betaed story that have many, many mistakes in them as well and, well, I don't see much point otherwise. None of us are professionals, after all. Another reason I have never searched for a beta is that once I have finished a chapter, I want to upload it straight away. It would drive me insane having to wait another few days for it to be betaed. I am not very fast with my updates as it is. Anyway Kay, thanks for reading and letting me know how much you're enjoying ASD. I hope to hear from you again in the future. ~Lesley~
Author's Response: Alexis! Good to hear from you. I thought you had deserted me. Glad to see you haven't. I get little enough reviews over here at P&S. I couldn't afford to lose yours. Hee hee. Glad you liked drunk HArry and Sev's very restrained handling of the situation. It was fun to write. Til next time (and I"ll be as quick as I can). ~Lesley~
Okay, can I tell you how much I laughed at this line: "No, you make the place look untidy." It was just SO Snape-ish. I loved it. But Sev tucking sick Harry into bed was so adorable (but don't tell him I said so or he'll hex me.) Poor Harry and Severus and their suffering by that creep's hand. (Oh, I hate that Voldy guy). But Severus earned major parent points with his handling of Harry and ignoring his own discomfort through the Dark Mark. And again we see how far our two favorite guys have come when Harry doesn't want to take the potion so he can try and know what is going on (because of Sev clearly) and Severus being painfully aware (but for good reasons) that Harry is so concerned about his welfare. Poor Severus again for having to be present at those torture and murder sessions. And him being sneaky about trying to make their suffering less really made me love my favorite anti-hero even more. You really write fun dialogue between Severus and Remus. I love that he just can never get Remus provoked no matter how snarky he gets. What's wrong with Albus?? *bites nails* Poor Sev hasn't had enough drama in the last 24 hours and now there's another crisis by the sounds of it. Behave while he's gone, Harry! Fabulous chapter, Lesley! Author's Response: Thank Cathy. Great review as usual. I just love doing snarky Snape as you know, but I also have to show that the man is human and that he does have a sense of humour...albeit a very dark, very snarky snese of humour. And yes, he and harry have advanced but they still get up each other's noses and will keep on doing so, I feel. You do feel for Sevv don't you, having to witness and pretend to participate in the murders. I felt for him enormously having to see Charity Burbidge hanging ove the table at the Malfoys and knowing she was going to be murdered and not be able to do a darn thing about it. I am sure they were not buddies, but they were fellow staff members and she called him 'Severus', so that indicates they had some interactions. What a great actor he was/is. I always knew he had to turn out to be a good guy, but the beginning of the book made it seem possible he was as evil as he appeared. I loathed the way he died so pointlessly because the evil so and so said he had to. AAArgh! Back to topic. I love writing Remus. He is just such a lovely man...well, I think he is anyway and I know all us LC fans think so. He will wear Sev down by degrees. But he was always the Marauder who was the easiest to tolerate. It's already started really...Sev being aware that he does know Remus better than he is comfortable knowing about. And realising that Tonks is sending covert glances Remus's way and knowing that Remy will deny his heart if it comes to the crunch because of his condition. And DD...I can't believe that only one reviewer has picked up what is going on. Especially in light of another part of the chapter... You'll have to wait ans see *evil laugh* ~Lesley~ |
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