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Reviews For No Difference
But HA! The beginning with the fire was hilarious! I just had to snort the whole way through. And the part where the owl eats the rabbit in front of Harry and Ginny was great. Those sort of things don't bother me much (I live on a farm) so I love to see other people's faces when something "gross" like that happens. XD I could just see their faces. “Thank you for the Foe-Glass,” he smiled nastily.- Teehee! I just love the classic Snape...even though he's really a Potter in this. I literally burst out laughing. Another goody! I'm off to the next! Author's Response: I know, I felt really awful for killing her, and killing her that way, and she was the only relative he had who he had a decent relationship with, and I'm really mean. I don't live on a farm, but I live out in the country, and until we got one of our dogs, we had a real rodent problem. She was wild for a long time before we got her, and she loves to hunt, so she took care of it for us very quickly. I can't count how many times she's shown us still alive kills, or swallowed something in front of us. I've also rescued a songbird that she had torn the wing off of. He had to have it amputated the rest of the way, but he now lives a very happy life as the spoiled pet of a vet tech. Poor Amy. She gets so confused when we don't partake in the bounty she brings.
Author's Response: It would, but it wouldn't really fit the mood of the story. Besides, McGonagall and Harry don't talk much. They have a much more "teacher student" relationship than "mentor protégé" the way Harry had with Dumbledore. Also, the war is over. Harry no longer desperately needs to be groomed to fight. I doubt I would work the conversation in.
Author's Response: Thanks! I don't think I've ever seen one either...
Author's Response: Harry is human. He has brief spiteful thoughts, just as all humans do. However, he has no intention of acting on them. He had no real intention of taking Snape’s gift back, he just responded to Snape’s inability to graciously accept a gift with a few passive aggressive thoughts that he then squashed. As to why it takes Ginny to push Harry into thinking about Eileen, Harry lost a lot of people he loves in a very short time, Eileen, Remus, Tonks, Fred, Colin (who he might not care deeply about but probably feels guilty over) Dobby, Moody, and Hedwig. To think about one of them would open the doors to thinking about all of them, and that’s too painful to deal with. He’s subconsciously trying very hard to not think about any of them.
That said, there are a few errors you might want to correct: "Harry’s mind had floated up to her as he waved good bye to the train as it sped out of the Hogsmeade station, and he hiked back up to the school as soon as the train was out of site." This sentence is rather awkward. For a moment, I actually thought that Harry's physical head floated up to Ginny. And I think the "site" that you mean should be "sight." "A thin blanket of snow covered the fields a vicious wind blew though him." Perhaps "snow covered the fields AND a vicious wind"? Or just "A thin blanket of snow covered the fields. A vicious wind blew him"? "He pealed the tape away delicately and unfolded the glittering paper." I think the "peal" you want should be "peel." "Peal" is actually to sound/resound, or beat. This chapter seems to lack the substance of the last chapter, and feels like a transition chapter. If that's your goal, then you got it, but if it isn't, then you probably need to rewrite it a bit. However, you did depict Harry's desire and anxiety very well. In fact, I feel a little scared of this Ginny. Author's Response: I fixed the grammatical problems.
You’re right; I did need Ginny to bring Eileen to the forefront of Harry’s mind, and to make him feel guilty about deceiving Ginny and abandoning Eileen. However, I also needed to have them interact more and deeper than I had before to make Ginny’s reaction to finding out about Eileen, and Harry’s reaction to Ginny’s reaction more believable later in the story. I had someone else comment that s/he would likely hit Ginny if s/he met her in real life. Ginny is quite aggressive in love, but at the same time, she isn’t cruel about it, so I can forgive her. She is a little frightening though, isn’t she? I did have Snape and Harry interact long enough for them to snip at each other though.
Author's Response: It helps, eventually, but Snape's problem has never really been with Harry. it has always been with James, and the fact that he thinks Harry is just like his father. Poor Harry indeed. He does get a lot thrown at him, doesn't he?
It's such an ackward position for them all - and Ginny doesn't even realise just how much so. Yet. So, what did Harry get his "son" for his first Christmas present anyways? Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. this wasn't a happy chapter for anyone concerned, was it? "Yet" is the operative word, Poor Ginny... Harry got him a Foe-Glass. I haven't decided on a birthday present (January 9th is coming up in the story too...).
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you've been enjoying it. My snape is not a nice man, which in my oppinion is exactly how he should be |
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