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Reviews For No Difference
And how very Snape-like for Prince to figure out who Harry is protecting. Author's Response: Scary isn't it? They had an apprentice and didn’t even realize it. Thanks ,I'm glad you thought so. I think Harry's starting to feel for Lily and Remus though...
A few mistakes to point out: putting the names and achievements of his fellow victims of intellectual robbery I the two columns. --“in the two columns” With a sigh he piled the notes and journals his teaching bag to peruse as his students worked instead of grading papers. --“in his teaching bag” (have something against "in"? XD) “I heard Parvati telling Lavender that Snape cornered you outside the prefects’ bathroom” she told him, taking away the pastries and eating one herself. “Bad luck, that.” --she knows Prince is Snape? Harry and Snape couldn’t help but turn to each other and share a bemused glance before they caught themselves and looked down. --do u mean bemused here or amused? Snape said with a small smile that boded very badly for the state of Harry’s nerves --“boded” is used incorrectly here. It’s a transitive verb, so needs an object. Ginny is so... I want to shake her and yell, "What's your problem?" If she had done the pranks to Snape, I might still somewhat understand, but she is doing it to someone who is supposedly a new professor at school. Granted, he's mean and nasty, but that doesn't give her the right to destroy school property just to get at him. I must say, I dislike her very much right now. I think the last line of this chapter is very effective. It hints at a whole myriad of emotions that Harry is feeling without outright painting it. It allows the readers to fill in the blanks of why exactly Harry may feel flattered, and why he may feel appalled. Flattered, because Snape (no matter if he is the son or not) is actually acknowledging him, and appalled because Harry doesn't want someone like Snape to acknowledge him. It's quite complicated, and utterly understandable. Author's Response: Thanks, very subtly, but it does shift. I hate “in”, it’s a foul little word, and my spell check corrects it to “I” when my “N” skips. Yeah, someone else caught the Snape one, and I banged my head into a table when I realized I did that. That was bad. Bemused as in “are there light bulbs following him, or am I hallucinating?” Harry may have forewarning, but I’m sure it’s an odd thing to see. “It boded ill for him” is correct, so my sentence is the same way. The smile boded for nerves. Ginny is the sort who gets so caught up in the brilliancy of her plans that she forgets things like destroying school property. She’ll learn. As it happens, I don’t like her much either, but I don’t have to like her for her to be believable. Thanks, I’m rather proud of that line…
Author's Response: Thank you, I’m glad you liked that. Snape is misunderstood, but he’s also chronically misunderstanding of everyone else. And Harry’s delightful to play with. |
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