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Reviews For No Difference
Author's Response: Harry is human. He has brief spiteful thoughts, just as all humans do. However, he has no intention of acting on them. He had no real intention of taking Snape’s gift back, he just responded to Snape’s inability to graciously accept a gift with a few passive aggressive thoughts that he then squashed. As to why it takes Ginny to push Harry into thinking about Eileen, Harry lost a lot of people he loves in a very short time, Eileen, Remus, Tonks, Fred, Colin (who he might not care deeply about but probably feels guilty over) Dobby, Moody, and Hedwig. To think about one of them would open the doors to thinking about all of them, and that’s too painful to deal with. He’s subconsciously trying very hard to not think about any of them.
That said, there are a few errors you might want to correct: "Harry’s mind had floated up to her as he waved good bye to the train as it sped out of the Hogsmeade station, and he hiked back up to the school as soon as the train was out of site." This sentence is rather awkward. For a moment, I actually thought that Harry's physical head floated up to Ginny. And I think the "site" that you mean should be "sight." "A thin blanket of snow covered the fields a vicious wind blew though him." Perhaps "snow covered the fields AND a vicious wind"? Or just "A thin blanket of snow covered the fields. A vicious wind blew him"? "He pealed the tape away delicately and unfolded the glittering paper." I think the "peal" you want should be "peel." "Peal" is actually to sound/resound, or beat. This chapter seems to lack the substance of the last chapter, and feels like a transition chapter. If that's your goal, then you got it, but if it isn't, then you probably need to rewrite it a bit. However, you did depict Harry's desire and anxiety very well. In fact, I feel a little scared of this Ginny. Author's Response: I fixed the grammatical problems.
You’re right; I did need Ginny to bring Eileen to the forefront of Harry’s mind, and to make him feel guilty about deceiving Ginny and abandoning Eileen. However, I also needed to have them interact more and deeper than I had before to make Ginny’s reaction to finding out about Eileen, and Harry’s reaction to Ginny’s reaction more believable later in the story. I had someone else comment that s/he would likely hit Ginny if s/he met her in real life. Ginny is quite aggressive in love, but at the same time, she isn’t cruel about it, so I can forgive her. She is a little frightening though, isn’t she? I did have Snape and Harry interact long enough for them to snip at each other though.
Author's Response: It helps, eventually, but Snape's problem has never really been with Harry. it has always been with James, and the fact that he thinks Harry is just like his father. Poor Harry indeed. He does get a lot thrown at him, doesn't he?
It's such an ackward position for them all - and Ginny doesn't even realise just how much so. Yet. So, what did Harry get his "son" for his first Christmas present anyways? Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. this wasn't a happy chapter for anyone concerned, was it? "Yet" is the operative word, Poor Ginny... Harry got him a Foe-Glass. I haven't decided on a birthday present (January 9th is coming up in the story too...).
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you've been enjoying it. My snape is not a nice man, which in my oppinion is exactly how he should be
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like it.
I hope Harry will outgrow his teenage fat-headedness, but it looks like this could be a very long story before that could happen. Please keep writing! Author's Response: Thanks, I’m glad you like the story. Snape actually likes rubbing peoples’ faces (especially Harry’s face) in unpleasant truths, doesn’t he? Harry will look up “plutocratic” (even if I don’t mention it in the text) just because he doesn’t like Snape having the better of him. Harry will outgrow it, with a little (or a lot) of prodding) and he’s going to come to a turning point soon.
Author's Response: Thank you, I’m glad you like it. It was fun writing Snape and Harry feud while ostensibly talking about something else. Of course Hermione is a curious girl. She thinks things need to be solved.
The dynamics between Harry and Snape are also quite unique. It seems from Harry's point of view that he would be very happy to forget his relationship with Snape, but that Snape has a very hard time of it. It's actually quite realistic, in that Harry may biologically be a father, but mentally, he is inexperienced and unprepared. The idea of a child is simply a concept and nothing more to Harry, whereas the physically changed Snape is forced to deal with something more than a concept. I look forward to seeing how this relationship will develop. Author's Response: Thank you, I’m glad you’re enjoying it so far. While reading the books, I came to the conclusion that there is something very fishy with the way Wizarding government is structured, so I used it as an excuse to broaden Harry’s mind to Snape’s perspective. The dynamics between the two of them are where this story really differs from Severitus fics. Because, as you said, Snape’s the one who changes physically, he’s the one who has to come to grips with the situation immediately. Also, Snape is mature (or perhaps set in his ways, I’ve heard good arguments against actual maturity) and older than Harry, so with Harry as father, their customary hierarchy is somewhat reversed. Besides, they can’t stand each other. It’s fun to write them.
And "Yea!" for Snape acknowledging their relationship. Good job. Author's Response: Thanks, you can tell I'm a Political Science major, no? Really, though there is something fishy about Wizarding government. I'd like to visit Wizarding Britian, but I'm not to sure about living there. *Grin* I tried to have my political disgussion emotionally relevent to the story and to the characters, and I hpe I succedded. |
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