Nice first chapter. I didn't notice any grammar issues. It amazes me how well writer who don't use English as their native tongue can write. Good job. I especially liked your Pomfrey. She always seemed like her infirmary was her domain and you crossed her at your own risk. She seems like someone who could rival Snape if she wanted.
Please Please PLEASE update this story, its a really good start!
Love this!! Please continue!
Please continue! I like this so far!
And I too want to know what Snape wants with Harry tomorrow! Please update soon and if you want or are still looking for a beta, I will be happy to help you, I used to be an English teacher. Now I work as a bookseller for Barnes & Noble.
I think you've made a very good start here, considering English is not your native language. What is, may I ask?
I have 3 stories posted here as well, feel free to read them :)
Title: Chapter 1
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Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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PLEASE PLEASE OH PLEASE UPDATE!!!!! This chapter was a great start!!!
A fine start, will need more to give a better opinion though.
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